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3.1.2021 - C_Vallion - Price of Peace - Chapter 5 or 1 - Price of Peace: Chapter 5 or 1 - (L G V, all mild) - 4694 Words


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On 3/10/2021 at 2:04 AM, Sarah B said:

In terms of prose, there were a couple places were you have close repetitions of words:

I'm actually surprised there aren't more of these. My line editing process tends to be prone to it.  Thanks for pointing them out!

On 3/10/2021 at 2:04 AM, Sarah B said:

The only think I really felt was missing without the earlier chapters was more explaination for how the visiting duke is tied to magic, if that's going to be central to the plot. 

That's more clearly defined in chapter 2.  I do want to add a little more magic reference in chapter 1, but I'm hoping to be able to avoid bogging anything down here when it will fit better with the events of the next chapter

Thanks!

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