Reading Excuses - 8/10/20 - Turin Turambar - River of Souls - Chapter 1 (5182)

[Robinski]

On 11/08/2020 at 10:49 PM, Turin Turambar said:

Never. It was a random convenient substance on hand to use.

She's never summoned a demon before! I took the impression that she did it all the time, because she had the powder, and knew exactly what to do.

On 17/08/2020 at 2:22 AM, Turin Turambar said:

She's an anthropologist who discovered demons are real and is writing a book on them.

I got none of that. We really need to know this on the first page, because it's N's whole motivation for doing what she's doing.

On 17/08/2020 at 0:40 PM, Turin Turambar said:

I'm prude enough to dislike cursing, even in writing. So just imagine it for the time being.

So, how are you going to write it when the time comes?

On 18/08/2020 at 2:38 AM, Snakenaps said:

On 18/08/2020 at 0:38 AM, Turin Turambar said:

I totally want all of my comments to be LotR memes from now on.

Is that a dare? 

 

And yes, I agree this is totally an improvement on the first version.