ginger_reckoning Posted April 8, 2020 Report Share Posted April 8, 2020 (edited) Hello! Here's the second chapter of my current WIP. Considered a science fiction, kind of. Takes place in this frontier area on another world. Pointers and critiques are very appreciated! Rip it apart, please. Spoiler Edited November 13, 2020 by ginger_reckoning h 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frustration Posted April 8, 2020 Report Share Posted April 8, 2020 You have a good voice and are much better at dialogue than myself. I'm really curious about the Tree as well all in all pretty good. 2 hours ago, ginger_reckoning said: Hide contents (Mareen is established as a sarcastic teen. Mohin gets more worried about his wife, and then goes to go wait for her at the pit. Introduce the kids.) I assume that this will be worked on. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ginger_reckoning Posted April 8, 2020 Author Report Share Posted April 8, 2020 12 hours ago, Booknerd said: You have a good voice and are much better at dialogue than myself. I'm really curious about the Tree as well all in all pretty good. Wow, thank you! 12 hours ago, Booknerd said: I assume that this will be worked on. Haha yeah. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Experience Posted April 10, 2020 Report Share Posted April 10, 2020 Where's your first chapter? 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ginger_reckoning Posted April 13, 2020 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2020 On 4/10/2020 at 5:46 PM, Experience said: Where's your first chapter? Not on here, but I can post it if people want to read it 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frustration Posted April 14, 2020 Report Share Posted April 14, 2020 On 4/12/2020 at 8:26 PM, ginger_reckoning said: Not on here, but I can post it if people want to read it I wouldn't mind doing so, let me know if this goes anywhere. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ginger_reckoning Posted April 14, 2020 Author Report Share Posted April 14, 2020 (edited) Spoiler On 4/14/2020 at 8:56 AM, Frustration said: I wouldn't mind doing so, let me know if this goes anywhere. Cool! The first chapter is in the spoiler box. Edited November 13, 2020 by ginger_reckoning h 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frustration Posted April 14, 2020 Report Share Posted April 14, 2020 (edited) 6 minutes ago, ginger_reckoning said: He smeared the glowing blue on her chest and in her hair. Typo. Thanks for the read this is great. Edited April 14, 2020 by Frustration 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ginger_reckoning Posted April 14, 2020 Author Report Share Posted April 14, 2020 Oh haha it took me a second to realize the typo was the wrong pronoun. Thanks! 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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