Popular Post Spockledorf Posted March 20, 2020 Popular Post Report Share Posted March 20, 2020 (edited) Hello! This is a Cosmere inspired work--a draft. And I'm looking for any feedback, tips or suggestions. This piece tells the story of the ship "the winds pleasure", from "Words of Radiance". When you hear it, what do you see? Thank you for listening and enjoy! ~ Spock https://drive.google.com/open?id=1dZsaJgwtYWzDKvrm4O4hvl9HCMmQDWrr or The Wind's Pleasure (draft 1).wav Edited March 20, 2020 by Spock 19 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NameIess Posted March 20, 2020 Report Share Posted March 20, 2020 This is AWESOME! Did you play it yourself? It makes me feel adventurous, I imagine a lighthearted ocean journey. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Experience Posted March 23, 2020 Report Share Posted March 23, 2020 I really like it! Do you have the sheet music for it? 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spockledorf Posted April 7, 2020 Author Report Share Posted April 7, 2020 @Nameless To me, it feels almost like a 'pirate' song--and I tried to make the music mimic waves! (you can see them if you try hard enough). And yes, I played it. Thank you! @EXPERIENCE This is still in my "rough draft" stage, so sorry--no music yet. But I'll try and write it down soon. I usually write it into Musescore (a sheet music program where you can make a share scores) while playing small sections on a piano, but I probably won't get that done until I have access to a piano again (sooner than later, hopefully). 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Experience Posted April 8, 2020 Report Share Posted April 8, 2020 So I really like the theme. A couple things I have to say. -It seems a little repetitive -I think that the start and end should be the same, but maybe add a little more crazyness in the middle for the high storm.(That is if you want that). I think that would make the song even better. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King Aragorn of Gondor Posted April 16, 2020 Report Share Posted April 16, 2020 This is great! I really like the flow of it, I took piano lessons for a few years, but could never write/play that. Great job! @Spock 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emily Posted April 19, 2020 Report Share Posted April 19, 2020 Wow!!! That’s really good. I especially love the dotted rhythms: as you mentioned, it’s almost a pirate song. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mat Posted May 7, 2020 Report Share Posted May 7, 2020 I really enjoyed this, I have played piano for half my life (I'm 14 years old) and have attempted to write a few songs before, with minimal success. I can see the theme you went for well. You should go ahead and post the sheet music when it's done, I would definitely try it out. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NJL Posted May 22, 2020 Report Share Posted May 22, 2020 I see waves on a flowing (but not heavy) sea. The music takes me away from the green and lovely shore out to sea and into a deeper blue water. The swells increase in size and frequency, the light plays across the water as it reflects off the spray from the ship's bow. The ship handles the heavy sea well through the lower tone in the middle of the song, and as the voyage concludes with a lighter tone, I feel that more story awaits. The music is very nice. Light and cheery at the start, and while the lower octave work is nice, I would suggest that you explore some variance on the darker themes hinted at. The return to the earliest theme is a welcome and beautiful transition. All in all, I very much enjoyed it. As a rough draft, you should be proud. I hope you continue it. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Truthwatch3r Posted May 24, 2020 Report Share Posted May 24, 2020 Wow, I really like this! Great job! Maybe this is a matter of personal preference, but I would probably add more support from the hand not playing the melody- more chording or a harmony line or something. I'll second the request for sheet music when you finish it :-) 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BringerOfLight Posted June 7, 2020 Report Share Posted June 7, 2020 Wow, it's beautiful. I know everyone has a full plate, but have you thought of writing accompaniment to Hoid's storytelling? For instance, a flute piece for when he tells Kaladin about the Wandersail? 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trentolio Posted June 16, 2020 Report Share Posted June 16, 2020 Good to see more TSA inspired music! Super cool, very sailory. Post the music when you get it done up. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoWibble Posted June 18, 2020 Report Share Posted June 18, 2020 This is amazing! Very nice! Keep at it so that I can get sheet music and a complete version! 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cynicalwindmill Posted June 18, 2020 Report Share Posted June 18, 2020 I haven’t read Words of Radiance yet and I don’t know whether that makes my feedback more or less helpful, but somehow this song made me think of a flashback sequence? Like it starts out with someone (Tozbek?) in old age, looking at their ship wistfully and thinking about younger days when they went on adventures at sea. Then in the middle it flashes back to that youth, showing all the adventures and thrills they had. Then at the end it goes back to the present, where the person is now too old to go on adventures like that anymore, and they’re slightly sad but ultimately at peace with it. I don’t know how much that actually matches with what’s in the book or what you were going for, but this was really beautiful! I’d definitely also be interested in sheet music. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Death spren Posted June 22, 2020 Report Share Posted June 22, 2020 Come one man! Thats to good to be heard by dark eyes like my self! Though keep on working on it (; 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Augustine Posted July 20, 2020 Report Share Posted July 20, 2020 Beautiful. Thank you for sharing it with us. 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FriarFritz Posted July 21, 2020 Report Share Posted July 21, 2020 I like it. The theme is catchy, and has a nautical feel without just sounding like a rip-off of Pirates of the Caribbean. Do you write a lot of music? 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spockledorf Posted July 22, 2020 Author Report Share Posted July 22, 2020 (edited) Hello everyone! Thank you for all the amazing feedback! I haven't been to the shard in far too long a time... Update for sheet music @FriarFritz @Cynicalwindmill @GoWibble @Trentolio @Truthwatch3r @Matrim's Dice @Experience, I typically start on it once I am finished, but it seems that many are interested in having it as soon as possible so my goal is to post whatever I have for "The Wind's Pleasure" by this Saturday. (Meaning, I'm saying this so I get it done, so feel free to message me and hound me to get it done ) @BringerOfLight yes, I've considered writing for Hoid's stories. What holds me back is that I don't want to create a piece that wouldn't match nor live up to the stories, I feel I'm not quite ready for that... As for the different instruments, I can play the piano but nothing else really. Though I currently have an electric keyboard, and I could make it a flute, I guess... @FriarFritz I written a lot of little things; a pattern here, a pattern there... (ignore the accidental pun) I post some of my work to the 17th shard, but not all of it You can find me at @spockledorf.piano on Instagram Edited July 22, 2020 by Spock 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spockledorf Posted July 28, 2020 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2020 (edited) I've FINALLY started a musescore file @FriarFritz @Cynicalwindmill @GoWibble @Trentolio @Truthwatch3r @Matrim's Dice @Experience, here is the beginning. (Yay! :D) The .mscz file is here if you're interested:The_Wind's_Pleasure.mscz Edited July 28, 2020 by Spock 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spockledorf Posted July 28, 2020 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2020 (I don't know why I made the rhythms so odd, it made it difficult to put it into a score... oh well) 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Channelknight Fadran Posted July 28, 2020 Report Share Posted July 28, 2020 13 hours ago, Spock said: (I don't know why I made the rhythms so odd, it made it difficult to put it into a score... oh well) (It's an old technique that doesn't have a name as far as I know. It's when you play your melody off-beat, which makes it catchy. Dunno how it works; they do it a lot in video game music) 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GoWibble Posted July 28, 2020 Report Share Posted July 28, 2020 (you guys are talking in parentheses. weird.) 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spockledorf Posted July 28, 2020 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2020 2 hours ago, GoWibble said: (you guys are talking in parentheses. weird.) (I know, right?) 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mist Posted July 31, 2020 Report Share Posted July 31, 2020 On 7/28/2020 at 9:35 AM, Channelknight Fadran said: (It's an old technique that doesn't have a name as far as I know. It's when you play your melody off-beat, which makes it catchy. Dunno how it works; they do it a lot in video game music) Syncopation? 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Honorless Posted September 12, 2020 Report Share Posted September 12, 2020 More! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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