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1 minute ago, AonEne said:

While psyche usually refers to one’s level of sanity or if they have any mental disorders, I think it would make the most sense for that to be in the Personality section, along with likes, dislikes, the way they react to people, and everything else. 

I still disagree. Wrapping it into another section doesn't seem like it's giving the psyche portion of a character as much importance as is needed.

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Just now, Invocation said:

I still disagree. Wrapping it into another section doesn't seem like it's giving the psyche portion of a character as much importance as is needed.

For a lot of characters, there isn’t that much importance, and a word or two generally covers it. This isn’t getting rid of the category; in the personality part of the reference character sheet it could be mentioned. 

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1 minute ago, AonEne said:

For a lot of characters, there isn’t that much importance, and a word or two generally covers it. This isn’t getting rid of the category; in the personality part of the reference character sheet it could be mentioned. 

I know that it would still be there, but in order for it to be mentioned in the personality part, you'd essentially be right back where you started with it in a category, only now it's inside another category. Seems redundant for something that relevant to a character.

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6 minutes ago, ZincAboutIt said:

We should put it to a vote imo. Let the community pick. I always end up deleting the Psyche category anyway and loop it into Personality myself though, so I suppose others could also do that too. 

I don't think that we need to vote on it. If you don't need it you can put it into personality, but as some want to have it as a separate category we can leave it where it is. I usually delete it as well, and just include it in the personality part.

The advantage of it being a separate field to form in is, that people have to consider it, no matter where they write the information down in the end.

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40 minutes ago, Sorana said:

I don't think that we need to vote on it. If you don't need it you can put it into personality, but as some want to have it as a separate category we can leave it where it is. I usually delete it as well, and just include it in the personality part.

That makes sense! :]

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8 hours ago, Invocation said:

Oh hey, Sun! Yeah, like Sorana said, not much is different in scoring from E3 to E4. A lot of new characters and shuffled-up old ones, though. I don't remember if you were here for the revamp of the Radiant power-sorting or not, but that's a thing that happened.

I was here for the Radiant revamp, and it marginally changed his score to be slightly lower. Really the entire part of his character is that he is really powerful in combat with some major limitations on his ability to act due to his Nightwatcher curse.

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Revised Jacien, now Third Ideal Edgedancer, no longer uses Division in combat (only for things like making pretty engravings and such, or convenience if he locks himself out of his house again) and has a better handle on his Nightwatcher Curse.

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Name: Jacien Aican

Sex: Male

Age: 18

 

Birthplace: Vedenar

Family: Callan (adopted father), Nisia (adopted mother), Sillia (adopted sister), Teldrin (adopted brother, deceased)

Appearance: 6’ 00”, red and black hair. Darkeyes with extremely dark violet eyes. Decent build, not overly muscular but not skinny. Wears a gray tunic, loose black pants, and a light grey cloak. However, this outfit don't provide much protection. When he expects to have to fight, he wears  green and white tunic, loose white pants, and the same cloak, all of which are glassweave for protection.

Investiture: third Ideal Edgedancer. Surge of Division (Nightwatcher boon), but he no longer uses it in combat, so you don’t need to score it.

Skills and special equipment: Skilled with swords and knives. Excellent cook (strictly harmless food). Has 2 short swords, 6 glass daggers at his belt, and several others hidden in various places. He also has a large number of gemstones to hold stormlight. A few special fabrials that, when the gemstone in the center is twisted, causes a paired fabrial to start flashing. He uses these fabrials as a way for people to contact him, or as an emergency beacon.

Weakness: (Nightwatcher curse) frequently zones out into an almost trance-like state where he mindlessly continues what he is doing. Never happens in life threatening situations. Trances never last longer than 15 min, and can happen as often as once every 40 min or as long as a day between them. He has learned to control them to some extent by keeping his mind busy, and can avoid them when it is most important.

 Is very disturbed by innocents being killed, by himself or by others, and will go out of his way to protect them. Has a tendency to jump right into things without thinking, and very frequently has gotten himself into trouble because of this. He also tries to avoid killing others if possible, sometimes making terrible tactical decisions to avoid killing.

Biography: Jacien was born to a Veden family, and his mother left at the Stump’s orphanage on the doorstep. He never knew his parents and never really cared to try and find them. When he was 10, he started to figure out Surgebinding after forming a bond with a cultivation spren, named Auri. He decided to leave the Stump’s orphanage, and ran away. He was discovered by a kind farmer who was selling his crop, and they took him in. When he was 16 years old, he saw a guy get mugged and knifed in an alley, ran over and accidentally used Regrowth to save him. Soon after this incident, he was attacked by a Skybreaker. He was strong enough by now that he was able to fight back and win, but during the fight, his adopted elder brother was killed. In his anger he went to visit the Nightwatcher where he asked for the power to destroy the people responsible. As a boon, she gave him the surge of Division, and the curse of having episodes where he loses focus and is unable to recall any details from that time. These episodes fortunately never happen during combat. He’s really sensitive about it, and tries to keep it hidden. After his visit, he gets kind of dark for a while, and hunts down some of the Skybreakers, until he almost kills Auri by behaving against his oaths, and moves on. After he almost kills Auri, he gets really protective of her, and takes his oaths extremely seriously. He discovered the greater cosmere during his quest for revenge and came to Alleycity mostly just to see what it was like, but has come to like it here. After looking into many different guilds, he approached the diagramists, and joined them for a time. 

After spending a while in the Alleyverse and getting involved in many situations of varied importance, he received an alert from one of his fabrials that was paired with his adoptive family on Roshar. He immediately left the Alleyverse to respond to the call. When he arrived, his family’s home had been destroyed and almost killed by the True Desolation. He managed to sneak them out of danger and helped them get re-established. He and Auri decided to stay with them for a while, and spent some time on Roshar, leading a simple life as a farmer and the local healer, and he enjoys not having to fight for awhile. After a month or two of this, a traveler appeared on their doorstep, begging for help. She looked as if she had been attacked, barely alive. Jacien and his family were more than a little concerned and immediately took her in and nursed her back to health. The traveller, whose name was Hannala, recovered quickly with some food, medical attention, and a little bit of surgebinding. After she had recovered, they asked who she was and where she came from. She claimed to be the niece of one of the men in the town, and was coming to live with him after her family had been killed by a Singer raid, but along the way ran into a group of Warform Singers, but escaped with only a wound. Jacien’s family informs her that her uncle had unfortunately passed away recently, and offers to take her in until she decides what to do. She’s surprised by their generosity, and accepts. Over the next few weeks, Jacien and Hannala get to know each other pretty well, and start getting closer. It doesn't take her very long to figure out about his “episodes,” and offers to try and help him figure them out. He doesn’t think it will do any good, but Hannala would not be dissuaded, and he gives in. To his surprise, she makes the connection that the episodes only happen when he is either doing something extremely monotonous or nothing at all, but when he is focusing on something that requires him to think and adapt, they don’t happen. He practices, and manages to be able to significantly reduce the number of trances he has a day, and figure out a few things he can do to keep his mind running when he really needs to not go into a trance.

Eventually, Jacien gets up the courage to ask her on the Rosharan equivalent of a date. He wasn’t sure what he was expecting, but it definitely wasn’t for her to go pale, then run off. A day or so later, she comes back, and tells him they need to talk in private. Once away, she reveals that she is actually a Skybreaker, and had been assigned to kill him. She explained that along the way, she had been attacked by a couple Fused. During the fight, she thought she had killed both of them, but ran out of stormlight in the process, then one caught her by surprise, not actually being dead. She killed it for real, but couldn’t heal herself since she was out of light, and stumbled down the road until she found a place to ask for help, and it just so happened to be his house. By the end of the story, Hannala is in tears, and refuses to meet his eyes. Jacien has no idea what to think, so he just leaves himself for a couple days. The thing he has the hardest time coming to terms with isn’t that Hannala was a Skybreaker and sent to kill him, but the fact that his perception of Skybreakers had just been destroyed. He previously thought of Skybreakers as emotionless monsters, caring for nothing but “justice” and incapable of mercy, but he now had irrefutable evidence that this was not true. This realization forced him to face what he had done in his quest for revenge, and consider the effect it must have had on the people that had known the Skybreakers he had killed. He doesn’t know how to deal with it, so eventually he goes back and just returns to normal life (Meanwhile his adoptive family has absolutely no idea what is going on just that these two are acting really weird right now). After a while, he and Hannala talk, and he forgives her for everything, which really surprises her, then he explains what he has been worrying about. They have a heartfelt conversation and in the end they both feel a lot better. Still, Jacien makes a personal vow never to use the power he gained from the Nightwatcher to hurt anyone ever again. He spends a few hours alone, slipping in and out of his Trance. Not sure what he is doing, he says “I will listen to those who have been ignored, especially those that I have ignored.” After another week or so, Hannala decides it would be best if she moved on, and leaves. Jacien lives with his family for a few more months and gets mostly back to normal. After a while, he starts itching for adventure, and decides to come back to the Alleyverse.

Guild: Unaffiliated

Personality: Pretty standard Edgedancer personality (As Nale puts it, Often gets caught up on the little things, and doesn’t look at the bigger picture). Very optimistic, no longer approves of revenge. History with Skybreakers also gave him a large disrespect for the law. Kinda ADHD, which does not go well with his curse. Ever since almost killing his spren, he has been extremely attached and protective of her. 

Fighting Style: He is a master of using his surges to give himself every advantage. He can keep his balance easily on slicked feet or slicked surfaces. He especially likes to slick the area around him, and then fight people in a zero friction environment, where he has practiced and most people are clueless. He also sometimes uses division to destroy the ground, making pits and such. Even without stormlight, he still is a serious threat, whether with swords or daggers.

Unless something has changes largely about Radiants since I last was here, this should still be good.

EDIT: I just realized I double posted. Sorry! Didn't mean to!

EDIT #2: Hello? its been a while and no one has responded. Is this good?

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On 11/7/2019 at 5:01 PM, Sunbringer said:

Revised Jacien, now Third Ideal Edgedancer, no longer uses Division in combat (only for things like making pretty engravings and such, or convenience if he locks himself out of his house again) and has a better handle on his Nightwatcher Curse.

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Name: Jacien Aican

Sex: Male

Age: 18

 

Birthplace: Vedenar

Family: Callan (adopted father), Nisia (adopted mother), Sillia (adopted sister), Teldrin (adopted brother, deceased)

Appearance: 6’ 00”, red and black hair. Darkeyes with extremely dark violet eyes. Decent build, not overly muscular but not skinny. Wears a gray tunic, loose black pants, and a light grey cloak. However, this outfit don't provide much protection. When he expects to have to fight, he wears  green and white tunic, loose white pants, and the same cloak, all of which are glassweave for protection.

Investiture: third Ideal Edgedancer. Surge of Division (Nightwatcher boon), but he no longer uses it in combat, so you don’t need to score it.

Skills and special equipment: Skilled with swords and knives. Excellent cook (strictly harmless food). Has 2 short swords, 6 glass daggers at his belt, and several others hidden in various places. He also has a large number of gemstones to hold stormlight. A few special fabrials that, when the gemstone in the center is twisted, causes a paired fabrial to start flashing. He uses these fabrials as a way for people to contact him, or as an emergency beacon.

Weakness: (Nightwatcher curse) frequently zones out into an almost trance-like state where he mindlessly continues what he is doing. Never happens in life threatening situations. Trances never last longer than 15 min, and can happen as often as once every 40 min or as long as a day between them. He has learned to control them to some extent by keeping his mind busy, and can avoid them when it is most important.

 Is very disturbed by innocents being killed, by himself or by others, and will go out of his way to protect them. Has a tendency to jump right into things without thinking, and very frequently has gotten himself into trouble because of this. He also tries to avoid killing others if possible, sometimes making terrible tactical decisions to avoid killing.

Biography: Jacien was born to a Veden family, and his mother left at the Stump’s orphanage on the doorstep. He never knew his parents and never really cared to try and find them. When he was 10, he started to figure out Surgebinding after forming a bond with a cultivation spren, named Auri. He decided to leave the Stump’s orphanage, and ran away. He was discovered by a kind farmer who was selling his crop, and they took him in. When he was 16 years old, he saw a guy get mugged and knifed in an alley, ran over and accidentally used Regrowth to save him. Soon after this incident, he was attacked by a Skybreaker. He was strong enough by now that he was able to fight back and win, but during the fight, his adopted elder brother was killed. In his anger he went to visit the Nightwatcher where he asked for the power to destroy the people responsible. As a boon, she gave him the surge of Division, and the curse of having episodes where he loses focus and is unable to recall any details from that time. These episodes fortunately never happen during combat. He’s really sensitive about it, and tries to keep it hidden. After his visit, he gets kind of dark for a while, and hunts down some of the Skybreakers, until he almost kills Auri by behaving against his oaths, and moves on. After he almost kills Auri, he gets really protective of her, and takes his oaths extremely seriously. He discovered the greater cosmere during his quest for revenge and came to Alleycity mostly just to see what it was like, but has come to like it here. After looking into many different guilds, he approached the diagramists, and joined them for a time. 

After spending a while in the Alleyverse and getting involved in many situations of varied importance, he received an alert from one of his fabrials that was paired with his adoptive family on Roshar. He immediately left the Alleyverse to respond to the call. When he arrived, his family’s home had been destroyed and almost killed by the True Desolation. He managed to sneak them out of danger and helped them get re-established. He and Auri decided to stay with them for a while, and spent some time on Roshar, leading a simple life as a farmer and the local healer, and he enjoys not having to fight for awhile. After a month or two of this, a traveler appeared on their doorstep, begging for help. She looked as if she had been attacked, barely alive. Jacien and his family were more than a little concerned and immediately took her in and nursed her back to health. The traveller, whose name was Hannala, recovered quickly with some food, medical attention, and a little bit of surgebinding. After she had recovered, they asked who she was and where she came from. She claimed to be the niece of one of the men in the town, and was coming to live with him after her family had been killed by a Singer raid, but along the way ran into a group of Warform Singers, but escaped with only a wound. Jacien’s family informs her that her uncle had unfortunately passed away recently, and offers to take her in until she decides what to do. She’s surprised by their generosity, and accepts. Over the next few weeks, Jacien and Hannala get to know each other pretty well, and start getting closer. It doesn't take her very long to figure out about his “episodes,” and offers to try and help him figure them out. He doesn’t think it will do any good, but Hannala would not be dissuaded, and he gives in. To his surprise, she makes the connection that the episodes only happen when he is either doing something extremely monotonous or nothing at all, but when he is focusing on something that requires him to think and adapt, they don’t happen. He practices, and manages to be able to significantly reduce the number of trances he has a day, and figure out a few things he can do to keep his mind running when he really needs to not go into a trance.

Eventually, Jacien gets up the courage to ask her on the Rosharan equivalent of a date. He wasn’t sure what he was expecting, but it definitely wasn’t for her to go pale, then run off. A day or so later, she comes back, and tells him they need to talk in private. Once away, she reveals that she is actually a Skybreaker, and had been assigned to kill him. She explained that along the way, she had been attacked by a couple Fused. During the fight, she thought she had killed both of them, but ran out of stormlight in the process, then one caught her by surprise, not actually being dead. She killed it for real, but couldn’t heal herself since she was out of light, and stumbled down the road until she found a place to ask for help, and it just so happened to be his house. By the end of the story, Hannala is in tears, and refuses to meet his eyes. Jacien has no idea what to think, so he just leaves himself for a couple days. The thing he has the hardest time coming to terms with isn’t that Hannala was a Skybreaker and sent to kill him, but the fact that his perception of Skybreakers had just been destroyed. He previously thought of Skybreakers as emotionless monsters, caring for nothing but “justice” and incapable of mercy, but he now had irrefutable evidence that this was not true. This realization forced him to face what he had done in his quest for revenge, and consider the effect it must have had on the people that had known the Skybreakers he had killed. He doesn’t know how to deal with it, so eventually he goes back and just returns to normal life (Meanwhile his adoptive family has absolutely no idea what is going on just that these two are acting really weird right now). After a while, he and Hannala talk, and he forgives her for everything, which really surprises her, then he explains what he has been worrying about. They have a heartfelt conversation and in the end they both feel a lot better. Still, Jacien makes a personal vow never to use the power he gained from the Nightwatcher to hurt anyone ever again. He spends a few hours alone, slipping in and out of his Trance. Not sure what he is doing, he says “I will listen to those who have been ignored, especially those that I have ignored.” After another week or so, Hannala decides it would be best if she moved on, and leaves. Jacien lives with his family for a few more months and gets mostly back to normal. After a while, he starts itching for adventure, and decides to come back to the Alleyverse.

Guild: Unaffiliated

Personality: Pretty standard Edgedancer personality (As Nale puts it, Often gets caught up on the little things, and doesn’t look at the bigger picture). Very optimistic, no longer approves of revenge. History with Skybreakers also gave him a large disrespect for the law. Kinda ADHD, which does not go well with his curse. Ever since almost killing his spren, he has been extremely attached and protective of her. 

Fighting Style: He is a master of using his surges to give himself every advantage. He can keep his balance easily on slicked feet or slicked surfaces. He especially likes to slick the area around him, and then fight people in a zero friction environment, where he has practiced and most people are clueless. He also sometimes uses division to destroy the ground, making pits and such. Even without stormlight, he still is a serious threat, whether with swords or daggers.

Unless something has changes largely about Radiants since I last was here, this should still be good.

EDIT: I just realized I double posted. Sorry! Didn't mean to!

EDIT #2: Hello? its been a while and no one has responded. Is this good?

Been busy lately, sorry.

Quick look would put it over point totals by a little, but given the restriction of not using Radiant powers in combat and that they're an old character I think this should be fine to go based on progression allowances recently.

EDIT: Sorry again, just realized I may have misread the profile here, will need to discuss with other mods before we can give a definitive rating.

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13 hours ago, Voidus said:

Been busy lately, sorry.

Quick look would put it over point totals by a little, but given the restriction of not using Radiant powers in combat and that they're an old character I think this should be fine to go based on progression allowances recently.

EDIT: Sorry again, just realized I may have misread the profile here, will need to discuss with other mods before we can give a definitive rating.

OK. Thanks! Just to clarify, he only doesn't use his division in combat. Progression and abrasion still are.

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On 10.11.2019 at 11:28 PM, Sunbringer said:

OK. Thanks! Just to clarify, he only doesn't use his division in combat. Progression and abrasion still are.

Hey, so just to give a quick head's up: Division will be counted into the total score, and I'm only waiting for some other feedback regarding his weaknesses. Sorry, that it takes us a while, I was gone the whole weekend, and it's a busy time in general.

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21 hours ago, Sorana said:

Hey, so just to give a quick head's up: Division will be counted into the total score, and I'm only waiting for some other feedback regarding his weaknesses. Sorry, that it takes us a while, I was gone the whole weekend, and it's a busy time in general.

In that case, his score will be way too high. :( 

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2 hours ago, Sunbringer said:

In that case, his score will be way too high. :( 

Alright here's the rating:

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Investiture: third Ideal Edgedancer. (155) Surge of Division (Nightwatcher boon) (30)

Skills and special equipment: Skilled with swords and knives. (melee average 35) Excellent cook (strictly harmless food). (20 // lowered points for expert, because cooking is more a fluff skill, but as other characters paid points for it so far, it would be unfair to set it as a free skill) Has 2 short swords, 6 glass daggers at his belt, and several others hidden in various places. He also has a large number of gemstones to hold stormlight. A few special fabrials that, when the gemstone in the center is twisted, causes a paired fabrial to start flashing. He uses these fabrials as a way for people to contact him, or as an emergency beacon. (no points added as characters are using mobiles anyway)

Weakness: (Nightwatcher curse) frequently zones out into an almost trance-like state where he mindlessly continues what he is doing. Never happens in life threatening situations. Trances never last longer than 15 min, and can happen as often as once every 40 min or as long as a day between them. He has learned to control them to some extent by keeping his mind busy, and can avoid them when it is most important. (-15 // mostly because he can control it, it never happens when he needs to be of a clear mind and never in a life threatening situation)

Is very disturbed by innocents being killed, by himself or by others, and will go out of his way to protect them. (-5 // lots of characters do that without substracting any points, to me this is more part of his character than a real weakness) Has a tendency to jump right into things without thinking, and very frequently has gotten himself into trouble because of this. (-10) He also tries to avoid killing others if possible, sometimes making terrible tactical decisions to avoid killing. (-10)

--> 240 investiture and skills // Weaknesses: -40 // leaves me at 200

You are right, that leaves him at a way too high score, but even without the surge he would be above the limit.

What is missing: We usually substract points for the oaths a Radiant has spoken. As I don't know his oaths, I couldn't do that, so if possible, I'd like to ask you to share them with me. If you don't want to add them to his character sheet, you can always use a pm.

Regarding the surge: We don't add skills for free, if there is no IC reason, the character won't use them.  This will lead to a situation, where the character logically would use the skill, but can't because of some OOC point problem. That's why we decided to count the surge as a full surge. If there is an IC reason leading to him to use it only in special situation, I can lower the points of course, but you will have to pay a little for it.

His weaknesses: If he is willing to die/ receive severe bodily harm to avoid killing someone I can up the points for the tactical decision by 5.

All in all, I think it should be easily possible to get him within the limit with only some minor adjustments.

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So I want to make a character but I’m not sure if he would be within limits or what I would do after or when I could officially join.

but I want him to be born on Scadrial with the feruchemal iron.

and than he world hopped to roshar and bonded with a highspren or a honor spren.(preferably highspren) but I don’t know if we know enough about division.

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3 minutes ago, FridgedCrisis said:

So I want to make a character but I’m not sure if he would be within limits or what I would do after or when I could officially join.

but I want him to be born on Scadrial with the feruchemal iron.

and than he world hopped to roshar and bonded with a highspren or a honor spren.(preferably highspren) but I don’t know if we know enough about division.

Other people have RPed it, you should be fine using Division. 

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Guys I just had an incredible, amazing, super unpolished idea for a character and I need feedback. I’m not actually hoping to make this character yet, I’m not looking for a new character, but also don’t steal this. 

Fullborn who was in an accident when young (haven’t decided exactly what, but something with construction I think) where a large piece of metal fell and crushed their legs. Now uses a wheelchair; hasn’t healed because their spiritual aspect sees them that way (haven’t decided precise details). Intense phobia of metal because of this, refuses to use any of their Feruchemical powers and will only use the Allomantic ones through the trace metals they get from water and stuff. I probably would have them get over the fear (though not the disability) eventually, but then I’d retire them pretty soon after so as to not be OP. 

...I know I said I’m not going to use this anytime soon, but I keep imagining them :ph34r: 

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On 11/22/2019 at 9:02 AM, AonEne said:

Guys I just had an incredible, amazing, super unpolished idea for a character and I need feedback. I’m not actually hoping to make this character yet, I’m not looking for a new character, but also don’t steal this. 

Fullborn who was in an accident when young (haven’t decided exactly what, but something with construction I think) where a large piece of metal fell and crushed their legs. Now uses a wheelchair; hasn’t healed because their spiritual aspect sees them that way (haven’t decided precise details). Intense phobia of metal because of this, refuses to use any of their Feruchemical powers and will only use the Allomantic ones through the trace metals they get from water and stuff. I probably would have them get over the fear (though not the disability) eventually, but then I’d retire them pretty soon after so as to not be OP. 

...I know I said I’m not going to use this anytime soon, but I keep imagining them :ph34r: 

Personally I really like it!

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