The Tragedy of Thaylen Field

[Wyndlerunner]

Is it bad that Pattern's death affected me more than Kaladin?

[Bigmikey357]

If that wasn't the most depressing piece of writing I've ever seen. If OB actually ended that way I'm not sure I could complete the series. Very good though. I remember the ending of Berserk, very apt as far as feelings evoked. You nailed it. Tear porn indeed. Now go back to the writing desk; love to see more from you.

[Marzipan]

WOW, what a ride!

I’m both sad and relieved this wonderful/heartbreaking fic is over...

[Bigmikey357]

The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

[Borio Singaldi]

On 2/6/2019 at 3:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:

The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

WHOA, YOU KNOW THAT SONG TOO?! I just listened to it less than an hour ago. Wow, that song is a ride.

 

Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out, this was a very, very well written piece of fanfiction that almost feels like it was written by Brandon Sanderson himself. I'm now gonna be joking about Oathbringer's multiple endings when the topic is brought up: "Oh, which ending do you mean? The happy (Brandon) one, or the sad (Jebus) one?"

A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.

I like these little headcanon hints interspersed here and there, such as Lift being the backup plan for Honor and Cultivation and Taln being able to summon his Honorblade. Or Jasnah wearing Plate in battle.

My biggest complaint, thought, is WHY IS THIS SO DEPRESSING?! Especially that "A meets B" encounter. That was the worst, you foul genius.

Storm you Jebus, you mastermind you. This was so well done, and I hate it in the best possible way.

[Overlord Jebus]

Thank you all for your kinds words! 

On 06/02/2019 at 10:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:

The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

I did this! I see what you mean haha

16 hours ago, Firerust said:

Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out,

Hey, please point them out. I'm gonna upload this to AO3 soonish and if I can fix a few typos before I do that, I would really appreciate it!

 

16 hours ago, Firerust said:

A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.

Yeah, you're not wrong with Oathbreaker being very cheesy. I agree. @WireSegal had the amazing idea to have Odium corrupt Oathbringer and turn that into Oathbreaker and I wish I'd done that.

Amaram is a good point. My idea was that Yelig-nar had pretty much entirely consumed Amaram at that point and so there wasn't much Amaram left by that point. I didn't go back and reread the Amaram battle section and I probably should have. Glad you "enjoyed" anyway! 

 

 

[Bigmikey357]

I can't take all credit for the song. It was on a Reddit list. Brandon was looking for suggestions for songs to write to and I happened to take a listen. My mind immediately went to tragedy when I heard the work.

[StrikerEZ]

@Overlord Jebus Wow, that was certainly quite a ride. Everything was just so...horrible and amazing and awesome. I'm dying to read some of your original stuff at this point now!

[+Ark1002]

On 2/3/2019 at 9:20 AM, Overlord Jebus said:

Here's a little post-word for those interested:

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Hi everyone!

I hope you’ve enjoyed The Tragedy of Thaylen Fields. This is by far the largest writing project I’ve ever completed and I’ve thoroughly enjoyed it.

First things first, I’d like to thank @Alyssum314for their continuous efforts to make sure my apostrophes and commas were in the right place. Turns out I absolutely suck at knowing when to end speech with a full stop or a comma and Lyss helped me a lot with this. I’d also like to thank @ladymxdnight for helping me with plotting, structure and another general grammar checker. If it weren’t for her, you’d have had Amaram using the Destruction sure and would have more than a few sections end on duds. Lastly, thank you to Jaffa6 on discord for his help with grammar and wording.

Now, if you’d indulge me, here’s some fun facts about the writing of Tragedy:

● The entire reason I wrote this fic was the scene where Nightblood kills Pattern. For years, people have asked what would happen if NB and a Shardblade clashed. My answer, since before OB came out, was that NB would eat the Shardblade immediately. Ever since NB turned up in WoR, I’ve hoped we’d see this in the books but until then, I wanted to write my interpretation of it. I wanted it to be Syl originally but I foolishly killed Kal in the first chapter so couldn’t use him! I liked how it turned out anyway.

● Something that surprised me was that Shallan was the hardest character for me to write, by a long shot. I almost didn’t write any PoV’s for her because I struggled so much with her. By contrast, Jasnah came to me as the easiest by far. I don’t know if it’s just because we don’t see anywhere near as much of her internal thoughts so it makes it easier to fill in those gaps with my own interpretation of the character or because I’m just more like her irl than I am Shallan. Either way, this is why we got a lot of Jasnah PoV’s.

● Another inspiration of this fic is a sequence known as the Eclipse from the manga Berserk. If you’ve read it, I hope this makes sense. If you haven’t, I highly recommend Berserk under the warning that you’re going to see some crem in it that makes my fic look likes a kids book. I tried to emulate the feelings I had during the Eclipse in this fic. Of horror and disgust and just a brutal emotional ride. I hope I succeeded.

● For the Dalinar chapters, I went back and read the Marsh chapters from HoA. Those were heavily influential in those parts, with Dalinar both moving on his own within the orders that Odium had given him and other times completely controlled by Odium.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed this terrible, awful ride. Thank you to everyone for reading and your feedback. I appreciate every single comment I get on these. Never forget, if you ever want to do something like this yourself, all you have got to do is write.

I doubt this will be the last thing I ever write, and hopefully this won’t be the last thing you ever read of mine.

Thank you all, and see you around.

 

Oh, completely missed that.

If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.

Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?

[Overlord Jebus]

9 hours ago, Ark1002 said:

Oh, completely missed that.

If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.

Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?

You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured  

[+Ark1002]

5 hours ago, Overlord Jebus said:

You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured  

Okay, good, if you want to participate you're more than welcome!

[+Ark1002]

@Overlord Jebus, Shattered Oaths, the RP, is now a thing.

 

On 06/02/2019 at 7:56 PM, Marzipan said:

WOW, what a ride!

I’m both sad and relieved this wonderful/heartbreaking fic is over...

*Thinks about the RP*

EDIT: Sorry for triple posting, I needed to quote the people.

[Darth Woodrack]

That was... Depressing. It was good though. I personally preferred the way the story went originally, for the pure reasons that Pattern and Kaladin died in this. It was amazing, and if you were to write a trilogy, or larger series, you could end one of the middle books like this. Seems a fitting way to make everyone cry, and then either completely stop reading, or need the next book.

Ark, I want in that rp.

[Guest Coda]

On 2/8/2019 at 10:28 AM, Overlord Jebus said:

I'm gonna upload this to AO3 soonish 

Is this posted to AO3? I searched for The Tragedy of Thaylen Field and Oathbreaker, but to no avail. If it is not, I humbly request that you post it immediately.

[Overlord Jebus]

8 hours ago, Coda said:

Is this posted to AO3? I searched for The Tragedy of Thaylen Field and Oathbreaker, but to no avail. If it is not, I humbly request that you post it immediately.

I haven't yet. My plan was always to give it another redrafting before putting it on AO3 (There's some glaring things it's missing and things I want to rewrite) but I was waiting to finish other projects before going back to this. Those projects stalled and I just never got back around to it.

 

Buuuut if there's demand for it on there, I'll bump it up the list! Thank you for reminding me to do this 

[NameIess]

Did Kaladin survive? he's the only one of them that didn't get killed by a shardblade, and after his "death" Syl stayed around. If he actually died, I think she would be sent into the cognitive, and damaged, not stay around long enough to be bonded.

Edited November 4, 2019 by Llstml

[Spren of Kindness]

You horrible genius.  That hurt.  That hurt a lot, and I couldn't stop reading.

[Shardsplinter]

OMG that was brutally and depressively amazing!!!!!! I just read the first chapter and couldn't stop till the end. When I was reading OB I actually felt For a sec there like Dalinar could get odiumed, gladly sad to see it written here so well. Some of my highligts:

Szeth's plot gone so wrong.....it went right? ( glad to c 1 of my favorite charachters not end up Dead and actually be sort of happy?)

Taln and Ash summoning their Honorblades( know I really want 2 c that in the books)

Jasnah soulcasting aluminium( it just feels like her kind of good idea) and defeating Amaram ( I'm fine with Odium winning and ending all live but Amaram getting away with everything, that I just can't have)

Rock seeing Syl and (even thow he was sure up until then Kal was still alive) still finding the streanght to keep fighting and protecting others( Kal would be proud) B44EVER!!!

[Aspiring Writer]

On 8/22/2018 at 10:40 PM, Ark1002 said:

I'm going to put this all in a google document once you are done, then give it to my mom to read, under heavy recommendation. She introduced me to Sanderson. Lets see how she likes this.

That is cruel, yet I support it for some reason.

[Malim]

I know this is an old topic, but I just read it.  You, sir, are a genius.  Incredibly heartbreaking, and yet I couldn't put it down.  It really brings home what the stakes are in these novels.  Thank you.

[Honorless]

Compliments to the chef but please don't cook this particular dish again

[Ghanderflaffle]

I forgot to post on this the first time I read it apparently. Jebus, first I want to smack you, then award you with a medal, then maybe smack you again, then present this to Mr Sanderson himself.

[LukeWasTaken]

Beautiful writing. I only really had one complaint. In Chapter 4, you had Ash say:

On 11/6/2018 at 7:25 AM, Overlord Jebus said:

His moment of lucidity had passed quickly.

I just wanted to point out that we have a WOB stating that Taln's moment of clarity was directly linked to Dalinar opening the perpendicularity.
 

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WonderfulTune

Is Taln's brief moment of lucid tied to Dalinar/Dalinar's powers?

Brandon Sanderson

Yes, it was tied to that.

That's all. Good job on the writing though, I think you got all the characters right.

[Shard of Reading]

Sooo.... I couldn't even read the first chapter and I had to keep telling my self that this did not actually happen. I'm sure it's great but let's just say I don't have the stomach for that sort of stuff.

Edited October 27, 2020 by Shard of Reading

[Gears]

Tragedy is difficult to write well. It takes great care, an eye for detail, and an intimate knowledge of emotions, along with a great deal of other things that I cannot think of in my current state of despair. You successfully turned Dalinar's greatest triumph into his greatest failure, and masterfully wrote all the consequences that entails. Your prose is something that can only be described as a masterpiece. Great art requires hatred, and I hate this as much as I love it for all the pain and sorrow this brought me. The epilogue was, of all things, the worst part. The most terrible thing about tragedy is that it ends, because when it's over, there's no way for anything to be okay. There's no light, no joy, no hope, only mourning for the end of all things. No pain, no anguish, no sorrow, no pleasure, no happiness, no Passion. When things end, all that is left is emptiness. Congratulations. There is nothing left.