Overlord Jebus

The Tragedy of Thaylen Field

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Is it bad that Pattern's death affected me more than Kaladin?

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If that wasn't the most depressing piece of writing I've ever seen. If OB actually ended that way I'm not sure I could complete the series. Very good though. I remember the ending of Berserk, very apt as far as feelings evoked. You nailed it. Tear porn indeed. Now go back to the writing desk; love to see more from you.

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WOW, what a ride!

I’m both sad and relieved this wonderful/heartbreaking fic is over...

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The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

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On 2/6/2019 at 3:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:

The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

WHOA, YOU KNOW THAT SONG TOO?! I just listened to it less than an hour ago. Wow, that song is a ride.

 

Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out, this was a very, very well written piece of fanfiction that almost feels like it was written by Brandon Sanderson himself. I'm now gonna be joking about Oathbringer's multiple endings when the topic is brought up: "Oh, which ending do you mean? The happy (Brandon) one, or the sad (Jebus) one?"

A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.

I like these little headcanon hints interspersed here and there, such as Lift being the backup plan for Honor and Cultivation and Taln being able to summon his Honorblade. Or Jasnah wearing Plate in battle.

My biggest complaint, thought, is WHY IS THIS SO DEPRESSING?! Especially that "A meets B" encounter. That was the worst, you foul genius.

Storm you Jebus, you mastermind you. This was so well done, and I hate it in the best possible way.

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Thank you all for your kinds words! :lol:

On 06/02/2019 at 10:01 PM, Bigmikey357 said:

The song for this story: look up the song All's Hell that Ends Well.  It's on YouTube.

I did this! I see what you mean haha

16 hours ago, Firerust said:

Anyway, I gotta say, other than the fact that there are many typos I would love to point out,

Hey, please point them out. I'm gonna upload this to AO3 soonish and if I can fix a few typos before I do that, I would really appreciate it!

 

16 hours ago, Firerust said:

A couple tiny nitpicks: I found "Oathbreaker" to be kind of tongue-in-cheek. Cheesy. Contrived. Despite that, it was kind of cool, working as a huge all-encompassing version of Vyre's knife. Also, Amaram seemed out of character to me. In OB, he showed moments of mirth and did a big character change, but still took his situation pretty seriously overall. In this version, he seems playful, immature, even childlike. Like: "Whee, I'm gonna fly around and kill Shardbearers with a grin on my face!" It was a total character turnaround. Sure, it was a turnaround in Oathbringer, but this is much more extreme.

Yeah, you're not wrong with Oathbreaker being very cheesy. I agree. @WireSegal had the amazing idea to have Odium corrupt Oathbringer and turn that into Oathbreaker and I wish I'd done that.

Amaram is a good point. My idea was that Yelig-nar had pretty much entirely consumed Amaram at that point and so there wasn't much Amaram left by that point. I didn't go back and reread the Amaram battle section and I probably should have. Glad you "enjoyed" anyway! :lol:

 

 

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I can't take all credit for the song. It was on a Reddit list. Brandon was looking for suggestions for songs to write to and I happened to take a listen. My mind immediately went to tragedy when I heard the work.

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@Overlord Jebus Wow, that was certainly quite a ride. Everything was just so...horrible and amazing and awesome. I'm dying to read some of your original stuff at this point now!

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On 2/3/2019 at 9:20 AM, Overlord Jebus said:

Here's a little post-word for those interested:

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Hi everyone!

I hope you’ve enjoyed The Tragedy of Thaylen Fields. This is by far the largest writing project I’ve ever completed and I’ve thoroughly enjoyed it.

First things first, I’d like to thank @Alyssum314for their continuous efforts to make sure my apostrophes and commas were in the right place. Turns out I absolutely suck at knowing when to end speech with a full stop or a comma and Lyss helped me a lot with this. I’d also like to thank @ladymxdnight for helping me with plotting, structure and another general grammar checker. If it weren’t for her, you’d have had Amaram using the Destruction sure and would have more than a few sections end on duds. Lastly, thank you to Jaffa6 on discord for his help with grammar and wording.

Now, if you’d indulge me, here’s some fun facts about the writing of Tragedy:

● The entire reason I wrote this fic was the scene where Nightblood kills Pattern. For years, people have asked what would happen if NB and a Shardblade clashed. My answer, since before OB came out, was that NB would eat the Shardblade immediately. Ever since NB turned up in WoR, I’ve hoped we’d see this in the books but until then, I wanted to write my interpretation of it. I wanted it to be Syl originally but I foolishly killed Kal in the first chapter so couldn’t use him! I liked how it turned out anyway.

● Something that surprised me was that Shallan was the hardest character for me to write, by a long shot. I almost didn’t write any PoV’s for her because I struggled so much with her. By contrast, Jasnah came to me as the easiest by far. I don’t know if it’s just because we don’t see anywhere near as much of her internal thoughts so it makes it easier to fill in those gaps with my own interpretation of the character or because I’m just more like her irl than I am Shallan. Either way, this is why we got a lot of Jasnah PoV’s.

● Another inspiration of this fic is a sequence known as the Eclipse from the manga Berserk. If you’ve read it, I hope this makes sense. If you haven’t, I highly recommend Berserk under the warning that you’re going to see some crem in it that makes my fic look likes a kids book. I tried to emulate the feelings I had during the Eclipse in this fic. Of horror and disgust and just a brutal emotional ride. I hope I succeeded.

● For the Dalinar chapters, I went back and read the Marsh chapters from HoA. Those were heavily influential in those parts, with Dalinar both moving on his own within the orders that Odium had given him and other times completely controlled by Odium.

Anyway, I hope you enjoyed this terrible, awful ride. Thank you to everyone for reading and your feedback. I appreciate every single comment I get on these. Never forget, if you ever want to do something like this yourself, all you have got to do is write.

I doubt this will be the last thing I ever write, and hopefully this won’t be the last thing you ever read of mine.

Thank you all, and see you around.

 

Oh, completely missed that.

If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.

Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?

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9 hours ago, Ark1002 said:

Oh, completely missed that.

If I wasn't in a library, I'd be screaming. That is an amazing sequel. I had an idea, recently, and I think it would be cool. I'd need your approval though.

Could we make an RP, based directly after this, where members choose a character and continue the story?

You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured :D 

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5 hours ago, Overlord Jebus said:

You absolutely have my approval for this! Please go ahead! I'd be honoured :D 

Okay, good, if you want to participate you're more than welcome! :D

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