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MrGinger128

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Hi Guys,

 

Yesterday, for the first time ever, I attempted to write a beginning of a story that's been rolling around my head for a good long while. A friend of mine had written 1000 words and asked me to read it so I thought i'd repay the favour.

 

It took me around 30-40 minutes, and I haven't touched it since I finished it.

 

Writing is something that i've wanted to do for a few years now but have never actually attempted at all until now.

 

I guess the reason i'm posting this is that i'm worried that it's just a complete waste of time so I thought i'd ask a community I know isn't completely brutal to have a quick look and maybe someone could tell me if it's worth me expanding on the idea.

 

 

 

Anyway, Thank you to anyone that reads.

 

(EDIT - full 1st Draft Chapter 1) EDIT 2 - Small tiny change EDIT 3 - More small changes + added PDF version.

The Dark of Night - Paperback size.pdf

The Dark of Night - Paperback size.docx

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Looks pretty good! Interesting idea; it would be fun to see it fleshed out and developed a bit.

 

Could use some grammar/spelling sweeps, but I didn't find anything huge. But why's all the dialogue in italics, if I might ask?

 

It's in Italics because....

 

 

It's not now :D

 

 

Thank you guys, That was great to hear and i'm going to continue working on the concept!

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Sorry to double post but I don't know any pro writers so I thought i'd ask here.

 

 

I currently intend on developing/tidying up this small section to the highest standard I can before moving on with the story in any way.

 

Is this advisable? or do you think i'd have a better time writing more than going back and doing re-writes and things on a larger scale?

 

Again Thank you so much for the words, i'm irrationally happy with you three internet strangers today!!

 

 

Daniel.

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Thank you guys!

 

You will be seeing more!

 

I hope to update my progress as i'm writing, I should have an updated draft of the re-write of what i've done so far.

 

Thank you all SO much. I've had this story revolving around my head for a few years now (i'm 24) and my good friend influenced me to start writing it down.

 

You guys however gave me the confidence to actually stick with it and if I ever finish i'll be eternally grateful haha

 

 

Hope to update tonight!

 

Daniel.

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Hi Guys,

 

I've not had a chance to write as much as i'd like, but i've re-written a fair chunk of what I started with and thought i'd give it to you fine people for a look!

 

 

Thank you all again for the fantastic words. I'm really hoping I can turn this into something.

 

Anyway, it's attached and I've marked where i've gotten to.

 

Thank you.

 

Daniel

The Dark of Night.docx

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Good writing. Some long, daunting paragraphs but they flow nicely. Prose is simple and effective.

 

Couple of things that I think needs improvement:

 

1. Lack of a hook.

2. Baige voice.

3. Names, names everywhere. 3 pages and my head felt ready to explode from information overload.

 

All points that I have had to overcome in my earlier writing (and still have to watch out for)

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Hooks rarely ever come in the first chapter, maybe more so in Young Adult writing. That's why good authors utilise a prologue as a kind of hook. It's not a biggy.

 

Give him a more distinct voice and the majority of the problems are fixed.

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Hi Guys, it's been a LONG time but I have an update.

 

Please see the attached. There may be story elements that contradict, I've yet to correct some errors, focusing on getting the story going a bit.

 

Please let me know what you think :)

 

Also I've just changed the formatting to fit with what i've been told is standard manuscript formatting, how is it for you guys?

 

Thanks again.

 

Daniel.

 

 

EDIT - Changed attached to match updated product. + added PDF

The Dark of Night - Paperback size.docx

The Dark of Night - Paperback size.pdf

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