Xcarthan12 Posted November 5, 2014 Report Share Posted November 5, 2014 (edited) Here is the first chapter of my NaNoWriMo novel, an epic fantasy entitled To Look Skyward.The premise: In a massive city built on and between two mountain ridges, the upper (literally) class oppresses the lower class, and through a magic that allows mind control based on elevation, has forced the lower class into virtual slavery.I'll let the rest of the book speak for itself.I've never tried this before, but I thought it might be cool, instead of uploading a file, giving a link to the Google Doc version of my chapter, in which you can make suggestions directly in the text that I can later correct. Mostly, I am looking for emotional reactions to things, such as "this part is cool" or "this joke wasn't very funny". Stuff like that. Not really grammar stuff, though if you find that go ahead and give me a heads up. Thank you so much and I hope you enjoy! https://docs.google.com/document/d/15y5ChcUzzbgIk9aU5KviFTyAXzrXQcN8BsfHwX7ORWI/edit?usp=sharing Edited November 5, 2014 by Xcarthan12 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Talanic Posted November 5, 2014 Report Share Posted November 5, 2014 Now, I might be missing something. And I don't actually have the time to critique tonight. But where's the link? 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xcarthan12 Posted November 5, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2014 (edited) *facepalm* Dang it. There we go, it's there now. Edited November 5, 2014 by Xcarthan12 0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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