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So I've been debating starting my own writing thread for a while, mostly because I am embarrassed of my writing. I've had a lot of friends and family tell me my writing is good, but I struggle to believe them mostly because of my age or their relation to me. I'm not exactly sure if they are telling the truth so giving my writing to complete strangers is my solution. I want as much feedback as anyone is willing to give. If nobody ever sees this I am fine with that. I have just come to terms with myself and decided that at least getting some of my horrible writing out there is a step forward. This will hopefully give me motivation to write as well. So hopefully I can become a better writer because of this. If this becomes inactive for a while so be it, but this will succeed to help me in some way I'm sure. WARNING: My grammar sucks. If you fear bad grammar abort mission now. I write based off emotion and my thoughts, not on grammar or grammatical correctness. (Plus im horrible at editing) So here it is. My Writing Corner of Chaos. My absolute passion, pride, and joy given to absolute strangers to correct, critique, and enjoy. Here is my first scene. (Based on #4 of my suggestions for @CalanoCorvus) Scene 1: Goodbye

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What if he was allomancer Jak? It’s never said which Noble house Jak is from other than he is just a Noble, and him being a Tineye kinda seems rare (in relation to their appearance in Era 2 in general, not rare as in the world, as pointed out below Ranette makes bullets to take down Tineyes) cause I don’t know any other tineyes to exist in Era 2. The goggles/glasses he wears could be Spooks modern version of his blindfolds and all the mentions of him in era 2 don’t seem to mention him wearing the blindfold anymore at all, he could still look like he’s just in his 30’s if he’s stored up enough atium before he stepped down after his 100 year rule cause it again doesn’t mention him looking old or even dying. This could explain Jaks choice of fashion to wear a mist cloak and a lawman’s hat like Wax, as he could be influenced by not only Era 1 characters he looked up to who all wore mistcloaks, but also would show that influence of those he looked up to carried over to the Era 2 character who he was inspired by to start a “Gentlemen Adventurer” arc of, Wax. Him being completely out of the Era 2 books with just the few passing mentions (none of which confirming he died of old n literally saying he actually didn’t age normally) is sitting weird with me and I can only assume as more time passes from my post Last Metal depression that there was more to him going on in this time that isn’t mentioned. Unless Brandon confirmed he died and I missed it (which is entirely possible as it’s been 6 years and I didn’t not keep up with the series updates and focused entirely on Stormlight lol) I’m going to assume that if the is a secret histories 2 than we might see more of spook but tbh it’s like 50/50 gut feeling/ manifesting characters I’m nostalgic for. (Say it with me everyone, “There is always another secret”)

Why did this book have to come out in November? October would have been fine. December would have been great! But this month, I had to juggle homework, writing 1,667 words every day, and working to put out the second issue of my school's newspaper since COVID with a team of only four people. Thus, I didn't finish The Lost Metal until way too late last night. But Rust and Ruin, it was amazing. I have some speculations and theories, but first I want to break down what I liked and didn't like about this book. (There isn't much in the latter category.) As a disclaimer, I haven't been exposed to any WOB's for the past eight-ish months. What I liked and expected The chemistry scene! I had a big grin on my face the entire time. I've heard a lot of complaints about Brandon Sanderson's books that are like "I don't care about how fabrials/metallic arts/Investiture works, just get on with the plot already!" But that's my favorite thing about them and those people can go eat crem. The well-written conclusion to Steris and Marasi's character arcs. Steris finally got the recognition she's continually earned throughout the series, and Marasi had a very (Spoilers for the Green Bone Saga) I'm still a bit salty that she didn't join the Ghostbloods because now we won't get that sweet sweet worldhopping action. But it was the right decision; Kelsier is kind of a self-centered narcissistic butt. We finally got some Kel page time! Like I said, he's a self-centered narcissistic butt, but he's an interesting self-centered narcissistic butt. I can't wait to see how his conflict with Sazed develops in Era 3 (and hopefully the back half of Stormlight???). What I liked and didn't expect The time skip! It just fit perfectly within everyone's personal arcs and the story as a whole. A nuclear fission analog?????? I was expecting technological advancements, but this is serious. If ettmetal and trellium / harmonium and bavadinium / sazium and bavadium / whatever you want to call them react in such an explosive way, what does that mean for the other god metals? If all of them react in the same way with all of the others, that could have serious and terrible repercussions for the entire cosmere. The Community reveal. Sanderson turned one of the least interesting loose ends from the first book into something that made me literally gasp when I read it. Aetherbound! Aetherbound aetherbound aetherbound. It's a great word. Aetherbound What I didn't like and expected Wayne's heroic sacrifice. I know Sanderson's a bit of a sucker for killing of main characters at the end of a series (a statement I was going to justify with examples but then realized that there were only three series he's actually finished, if you don't count White Sand or Legion; Mistborn Era 1 is an example of this, it's zigzagged with Alcatraz, and I refuse to finish the Reckoners). But this felt forced to me. It felt like Sando was writing Wayne off for shock value instead of providing a satisfying resolution to his arc. If he hadn't died, he could have gone back to Elendel and sought out some actual closure with Allriandre, and took the time to move on from MeLaan. Those are both tricky things to write, and I realize that, but killing Wayne off felt like the easy way out. What I didn't like and didn't expect I found it hard to keep my willing suspension of disbelief when I saw the new, completely zoomed-out map. In the third book when everyone was talking about how the people of the Basin were too settled and dormant to explore the world around them, I was like "sure" because I thought that the Southern continent was completely separate from the Basin and its surrounding area. But they're connected! They're. Storming. Connected. I know there's mountains in the middle, but someone would have to have been at least a little but curious as to what's off the edge of their map! You're telling me that for three hundred years, there was more land to be explored and everyone was just like "meh"??? I find that hard to believe. The general fact that we got almost no Malwish content. Couldn't we have at least seen part of the Southern Continent? Idk but I felt kind of cheated. I hope there's more in Era 3. Overall, I give The Lost Metal an 8/10 on my cosmere rating scale. (For reference, White Sand is a 1 and The Way of Kings is a 10.) Overall, it was very good. - Szeth

So… I’m going to try and do Inktober this year. I’m gonna try and do both the official prompt and the cosmere one. I don’t know if I’ll be able to do both every day, but I’ll try. This is going to be fun! Here’s day one for the cosmere prompt. It was hard to figure out what to do for this one, but I’m happy with how it turned out.

So, would anyone be interested in me writing a book like Fadran has? It wouldn't be frequent, but I'd definitely do it if there is interest.

BBC America has just dropped a few trailers for their upcoming TV series The Watch, which is allegedly inspired by Terry Pratchett's Discworld novels. I took a look, and... at this point, I don't hate it with every fibre of my being, which is honestly surprising, given what I already knew of the show. (As a whole, that is. There is one thing that I utterly despise, but I'll get to that later.) Now I'll break down my reactions to individual points of the trailers. (Be warned, the spoiler boxes probably contain spoilers for the books.) Aesthetics Sam Vimes Lord Vetinari Carrot Angua Cheery Lady Sybil

The Alleyverse Zoo was now open. The Sentinel zookeepers had spent weeks gathering chasmfiends, chulls, santhids, whitespines, spren, koloss, aviar, nightmaws, meekers, cremlings, Rysahdium, horses, seons, chickens, and animals from all over the place for a brand new zoo. A Sentinel wearing a purple coat cut the ribbon with a Shardblade, cause heck why not.

No shipping business here folks, keep your gonadcanons under control. This is mostly a crack theory because Surges and how they manifest in different realms are murky topics, but 'Spiritual Adhesion', this WoB, and the note on Lightweaving in WoR Ars Arcanum have convinced me that Szeth's screams and Shallan's fractured psyche are the results of their reckless use of Adhesion and Illumination respectively.

Well, here goes nothing. So, there has been quite a bit of discussion about how steel feruchemy works, and I am going to try and put together a bit on how I think it might work, why, the problems with it working in this manner, etc. I know this has been discussed before; I am trying to put it all in one place, I don't want to necro, and I want people to start talking about this again. To start, steel feruchemy stores physical speed, supposedly. When you store it, you go slower, and it has been described as feeling like 'moving through molasses'. When you tap, you go at much higher speeds than normally possible, including feats such as running faster than late 20th century automobiles, shooting several people in one room, from different angles, in a small enough space of time that it sounds like only one shot was fired, and dodging bullets. How I propose to suggest it works is thus; when you store speed, you are storing a percentage of the speed at which you do things. Not muscular speed, or the speed at which your metabolism works. At least not technically. The second is close, but only to the effect that your body has more speed, not that it is going faster. Speed is a function of Distance/Time. To go slower/faster, you must either increase/decrease distance, or decrease/increase time. I propose we decrease/increase time. This would fit most of the usual parameters of feruchemy. You store a percentage of something for a set amount of time; you get back the same percentage for the same amount of time. The quicker you burn, the faster you go, for the shorter period of time. This would solve most of the problems with friction with the ground, running into things, etc. Because you are technically moving at the same speed you normally would, only with more time to run in, running into things should effect you normally, while the things you hit would be hit by something moving in twice the amount of time they are(twice the speed?), which would mean that they are being hit by something moving twice as fast, while you are being hit by something in half the time as you are (half the speed?). This would also explain the problems with storing it, especially if you have a lot to do, as Sazed did.If you are literally storing time, it's going to take a while to store anything meaningful. And it would never be worth it to store speed to go faster later, unless you have some empty days before packed days. Other than that, it will always be end-neutral. It would also solve most of the problems with cornering, and stopping, aside from some possible road/rug/floorburn. It even loves the problem with continuing with speed while jumping, as your momentum would carry with you. This would work because you are still moving twice as fast, because S= D/T, so when you jump, you will retain the same S, to some extent. It would be very interesting to see someone fall while tapping F!Steel though, as they would experience it more slowly, while falling at the same speed. Also, there are very few WoB's about F!Steel, which makes this all based on speculation. Also, I am not a physics major, so this is all based on whatever I have left in my head from years of liking this kind of thing. The problems... This does not explain things like not having to eat while you are using it, as I am pretty sure Sazed did in the HoA. Air friction might still be a problem, but not until you hit extremely high speeds, at which point it would be a problem anyway. There are still a few problems with friction, heat, etc. There are also a bunch of places where this has already been discussed, most of which I have read. I will provide them for context: http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/48947-steelrunning-secondary-powers-what-kind-of-imbalanced-broken-power-is-that/#comment-354409 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/53664-sazeds-waste-of-steel/#comment-423200 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/53168-why-is-it-difficult-to-store-speed/?page=3#comment-408019 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/54107-bleeder-using-feruchemical-steel/#comment-434023 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/49981-feruchemical-steel-suspended-animation/#comment-363373 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/23414-what-specifically-is-the-deal-with-feruchemical-steel/#comment-231088 http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/3459-feruchemical-steel-physical-or-temporal/#comment-55569 If you can think of more links, I will edit them in, and if there are holes, I will be very happy to discuss them. I know there are problems with this theory, and I don't mind them being pointed out.

LG19: Twinborn City After seeing your peaceful village collapse- literally- with infighting and treachery, you fled to a nicer place with many companions. You attracted other twinborn with your promise of equal rights for everyone with allomantic and feruchemical powers. Although you had to exile a few dissidents, it's been quiet here. But then everything changed when the Fire Nation attacked. you found a dead body in the city, stabbed through the heart. Were you the murderer, or will you be a victim? There's only one way to find out. Factions Day and Night Map Actions Items Powers Allomancy Enhanced Allomantic Powers Feruchemy Kandra Blessings and Info Very Rare Occurrences Quick Links If you were in LG11, most of the rules will be familiar to you, however, a few have changed. Kipper and Elbereth and I are GMing this game. The game will start one week after this was posted, on Tuesday 29 March. Rollover time will be determined then or between now and then.

I have an idea. I was reading The Way of Kings, the part where Kaladin has the vision in the chapter Child of Tanavast, when I had a thought. How do visions work in the Cosmere? Is it done in the, Physical, Cognative, or Spiritual realm? Let's take them one by one. First, the Physical realm. The Physical realm is bound by the laws of physics unless assisted by the Spiritual realm (a spren). That is why the term "extranatural" coined by Syl is so funny to me, but that's a side tangent. It's not possible to have a vision in the Physical realm. Next, the Cognative realm. As far as we know, it exists in parallel with the Physical realm. If the body that a cognition* is tied to moves, so does the cognition. If the physical body doesn't move in a vision, neither does the cognition. Lastly, the Spiritual realm. We know next to nothing of this realm. All we really know is that the spirit lives on after the body dies. After that, it's all a mystery. Suppose the Spiritual realm doesn't always exist in parallel with the other two realms. What if the spirit is capable of moving on its own, away from the body and the cognition? If that is true, what if it can only move away from a body and cognition if the two are resting and if aided by investiture? What grants investiture? Spren. A powerful spren, say... the Stormfather, could potentially pull a man's spirit put of its parallel existence with its body and cognition and towed it along the edge of a storm while the body was sleeping. Now. That being said, how does that work with Dalinar's visions? Are spirits bound to entropy, which is a law of physical time? Can they in fact move through time if aided by investiture and the Stormfather? It would mean that Dalinar's spirit is being thrown through time, then brought back into the present (as the body perceives the present) all in the course of a highstorm. Amazing. Also, is this the way world hopping works? Jumping through the worlds on a Spiritual level and waiting for your body and cognition to catch up? That would be interesting (an understatement, I know). It would also require a special type of investiture. A shardpoool, perhaps? A place where the power of shards coalesces into a concentrated pool? That would make it easier for the spirit to leave the parallel existence it theoretically occupies. This is, as far as I know, a new concept and needs more proof until I can hammer it out. But consider the possibility of everything existing in parallel until investiture gets involved and makes it possible for a spirit to move about freely. *Cognition is the term I want to use from here on out to mean the Cognative state of something.