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Last time on How Old Trahaearn Lost His Eye: Trahaearn has declared he and the boy will go to Fairyland to get the boy's father back. They make their way to Mrs. Caughthron's house, where the boy meets Joanna, a startling normal-looking fairy girl, who has a room full of drawers and keys, implying certain kinds of exploration that will probably happen in this weeks' submission. Feedback: for the regulars- same as usual. For the new folks- I'm most interested in commentary on the characters and relationships, and on your personal emotional experience of this part of the story.

Last time on How Old Trahaearn Lost His Eye: After his strange meeting with Trahaearn on the hill, the boy and his father return home. The boy puts away their cow, Efa. But there is strange shadows in the barn. A fairy maiden with brambles on her back milked Efa in the dark, and the boy has shooed her away as politely as he knows how. Back at the house, Papa has disappeared! Trahaearn arrives too late, but explains that Papa has been taken by the fairies. He looks after the boy, helps him to be calm in the morning. Declares that they'll go to Fairyland to get his father back! Current submission: two chapters. CAUGHTHRON'S UPSTAIRS Desired Feedback: Please continue to let me know how you're feeling about the characters and relationships. You folks are already great at spotting the line-to-line stuff, so keep that coming too! Thank you

Last time on "How Old Trahaearn Lost His Eye", the boy had followed his Papa to the hill (without permission) and met Old Trahaearn. Once inside, the boy had his nettle stings treated, and Trahaearn gave him socks. Made tea and told a fairy story, the significance of which is as yet unknown to the boy. Trahaearn made comments about fairies' view of things. About endings and about the idea of a home, ideas which make sense to humans, but not to fairies. Papa shows up. Where had he been the whole time? Boy expects severe consequences, but Papa listens and sees the boy is growing up. It starts to rain, and they run home. There are two chapters in this submission: TWO APPEARANCES OPEN AND CLOSED Regarding Feedback: You guys are already giving me great notes, so I don't feel the need to steer too hard. Continue noting any odd phrasing. I'd like the reading experience to feel more or less like floating down a river, so keep me informed on anything that interrupts your flow. Other things, tho: Continue to comment on characters and relationships, as relevant. Also, please comment on your immersion level and emotional state. I believe the real story is what's happening in you, not what's on the page. So I will appreciate all the information I can get about that.

Last time on How Old Trahaearn Lost His Eye (part 01): Our protagonist, a young farmer boy, follows his father on an errand (secretly, without permission) away from home to meet Old Trahaearn who lives on a hill. The boy is determined to satisfy his curiosity about Trahaearn, to ask about his one eye and what happened to the other one. The boy arrived at the hill and was stung by nettle after he hopped over Trahaearn's fence. Having continued up the hill, the boy overheard a story being told and was caught listening at the window (by Trahaearn himself, who called the boy 'trespasser'!) Chapters in part 02: Bound Woefun and the Gnome The Feels of Endings Feedback I'm most interested in for part 02: How do you feel about the established characters (and their relationships) at this point? Do you have suspicions about things the boy doesn't know yet? What's the most memorable bit, for you, in this section?

Greetings! Excited to have discovered this group. This is my first submission, and I'm looking forward to participating on both side of the critique process. Hoping to hear:> your feelings about the characters > curiosities about the situation and setting > what you think will happen next All feedback is appreciated. Thank you!