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  1. Hey, there actually is a casting thread pinned at the very top of the page with pretty recent posts on it. Just thought I'd let you know.
  2. I don't think Tom Holland as Spook would quite work. He's getting too old and popular. Someone like Finn Wolfhard though, could pull it off. Super awkward physically but in a few years of shooting (by the time Hero of Ages wraps) he could have quite the coming of age so to speak. Also, I just had an interesting idea...if you didn't gender-swap Ham then Alan Richson would be an excellent choice to ply him!
  3. Wait...you "made" boots!? What!? Who just "makes" boots anymore? So cool. Honestly. Now... "I am offend! You will repay with boots!"...
  4. Is anyone watching these? Or watched? Was it a series of comics first or is this where it starts? And... What did you think?
  5. Interesting...where's the rest?
  6. @Kureshi Ironclaw @Invocation @Keeper Exile @Ookla the Ocelot @Silverbard Alright all, I've made some changes that reflect some of the feedback I got from right here and also some other ideas I had on my own. I've also added a portion that wasn't in the initial sample but I hope you can take time to look at it as it has a decent amount of dialogue and I'm honestly curious as to how it reads. Its not too long of a read, just 4 pages in a Word doc. Thanks in advance for any feedback you provide, I really do try to take it all into consideration as I've not really written much fiction before. The bulk of my writing experience is informational or motivational/inspirational blog type articles... Ironwood Copy 1.docx
  7. @Silverbard, I rather enjoyed it! As for your 3 big questions, 1) I think the beginning is fine. There will be some that may disagree but mostly that will be due to reading preferences. You can't please everybody... 2)As was said before, I think Willow's personality remains to be seen and that's ok. This is only 1 small scene. Keep fleshing it out and it will develope distinctly. Someone recently told me that getting a character's personality can be difficult but I think you have it well in hand... 3) As a father of 10 children, yeah, I'd say she sounds "12 yr. old" enough to me... Good luck with it and I can't wait to read more!
  8. Hey @Silverbard, thanks for the comments! I agree that the flash-backiness (how's that for a word!) is a little out of place. Due to the feedback I received after initially posting I have decided that I will indeed move the offending flashback or possibly scrap it together, working the separate bits of information and background into other scenes. I've been extremely busy lately but am hoping I can post a revision soon. Thanks again, and welcome to the Shard!
  9. Another option is that if you have Word, theres a good chance you are paying for Microsoft Office, which is only like $7 monthly. If so, or if you go that route then you'll have access to Microsoft Cloud Storage and when you open Word it will be right there and can autosave to the cloud - makes it really handy.
  10. I did and I've already read it. I'll leave a review on Amazon for you too very soon but I wanted to let you know that I thoroughly enjoyed it! The storyline was good (I have a few questions but I assume they'll be answered in future sequels). My favorite thing about it was that there seemed to be no cursing, no sexuality, no wanton immorality. I found it to be very refreshing and the story moved along just fine without everyone taking clothes off or screaming profanities, so, thanks for that. My one main critique is the ending. I get that you were trying to setup a bit of a cliffhanger but it seemed a bit sudden. Even with that though, it was still fun. I'll be looking forward to the next installment.
  11. I do believe you are correct - I shall have to make my own! I was trying to be lazy and see if someone had a template but i think I've spent more time now here discussing it than just getting it done! Anyway, thanks for the advice it is appreciated and some of it will indeed be incorporated. Have a Merry Christmas!
  12. Yeah, sorry about that. Thanks for all of the responses! I've seen these posts but I've been kinda busy. Honestly, these are all helpful in ways but not really what I was looking for. When I was a kid I had some Marvel trading cards that had, like, a power graph of sorts. Strength, invincibility, and several other traits with a corresponding bar to show their levels, like the picture attached. I could make one but I thought I would see if one already exists that might cover more than mine would. I'm kinda new to this so I might miss something but I guess that's part of the process. If I get to work on it in the next week or so I'll post it so folks can see it and even use it if they so desire.
  13. Doea anyone have a character creation form, scale or chart they use to help in the creation of their characters? Aside from the neutral good/chaotic good charts... Something that might list out basic characteristics that you could then input the characters levels of said characteristics?
  14. Yeah, I was attempting to "science" the powers out a little and give a plausible explanation- essentially they would expand the carbon to all the rest of the body/wood turning it to carbon steel. I think im just going to leave mysterious though - they just do it. So, the cultural aspect I tricky...the main characters are all from a culture that has been made up/ manipulated by an oppressive but deceptive alien alliance called The Sovereignty. This makes it hard to do much with the "cultural" suggestion as they will be discovering as they go along in the story line that the one the once thought to be their Saviors are truly their captors. That is all I could ask for. Thank you in advance.
  15. Sounds interesting, I like the idea of using sound, both song and speech. And the written word too - cool! How do these interact with one another? Do the users oppose each other? Are they grouped together (jedi vs sith) or are they autonomous individuals with their own will and ambitions?
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