king007 Posted April 5, 2016 Author Report Share Posted April 5, 2016 I'm intrigued enough to want more! Thanks, I'll hopefully write more and share it. Yeah, I rather like the tone of this as an introduction, it does ask questions about the nature of the being we're seeing here, the nature of his power and influence, which seems wide-ranging. I couldn't read a whole story in this tone though, it's very grand and portentous, rather melodramatic. I think that's okay in small quantities, but rather heavy for a whole novel - imho. Good to see some words from you, King, I hope this comes together for you. There are some nice ideas and phrasing in the language, not too much that I would comment on if I was line editing. Thanks for your continued support Rob; I sincerely appreciate it. Was that a proper use of the semi-colon? I can see the point you're making. It would be tiring to the reader to go through all this ambiguous wording page after page. I'm planning to write this for just the first scene. I feel like it kinda establishes the personality of the character, as if he was a deep thinker or a capable person without giving too much information. I don't know if that's how I want to portray my character, I'm just writing this for the sake of putting words out of my chest and feeling good about it. Past the first scene, I don't have any tangible idea. But, I'll just keep writing my mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 7, 2016 Report Share Posted April 7, 2016 Okay, I can't seem to find the forum terms today. I've got a question about conduct/etiquette on this board. A kickstarter for something that will pay me if it funds is going live soon. Can I post about it here? Post a link? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robinski Posted April 7, 2016 Report Share Posted April 7, 2016 Yeesh, not sure. I don't think the guidance for this thread says anything about such things. As to the guide for the 17th Shard site - I've never seen it. On a personal level, such a post wouldn't bother me, but I'm a minority of one. I reckon this is why Silk gets paid the big bucks (metaphorically speaking), to make calls on such weighty topics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
king007 Posted April 7, 2016 Author Report Share Posted April 7, 2016 I found this post for rules and etiquette http://www.17thshard.com/forum/topic/6-a-welcome-to-17th-shard-and-the-rules/#entry12693 Don't advertise your stuff (unless of course it's in General Discussion). Post your stuff in the correct forums, and stay on-topic. Common sense stuff, here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 7, 2016 Report Share Posted April 7, 2016 Well, then I guess I'll ask explicitly, since this is a general discussion space for this subforum. Would people find it appropriate if I posted a link to a kickstarter for an anthology I have a story in when it goes live? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kais Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 I have no problem with it, Eisenheim. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
king007 Posted April 8, 2016 Author Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Sure, I see no problem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kais Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Guys! Finished the R&R rewrites last night on AFD! Now for a final proof read, and then it goes back to the agent. Wish me luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ecohansen Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robinski Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Good Luck Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aeromancer Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 (edited) Atra esterni ono thelduin! ... It's good luck in the ancient language of the Inheritance cycle. Edited April 8, 2016 by aeromancer 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mandamon Posted April 8, 2016 Report Share Posted April 8, 2016 Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kais Posted April 9, 2016 Report Share Posted April 9, 2016 Well, I just sent it off. Time for a panic attack for the next month? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 Hi everybody. I'm on kickstarter. This anthology has a story by me and also stories by a bunch of more experienced, well-known people. https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/stevensaus/no-sht-there-i-was-an-anthology-of-improbable-tale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ecohansen Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 It looks like a great project, Eisenheim! So. I submitted my story from last week to Metaphorosis on Thursday night--there were of course substantial edits between monday and Thursday, and all y'all's suggestions and edits were hugely helpful. I heard back this morning--Metaphorosis' response time is one of the things that attracted me to it. I wasn't in the 2% that is accepted outright, but I was in the 5% that is allowed to submit a rewrite to be reconsidered. So yay-ish, I guess. I'm about to post the editor's analysis and my re-write proposal on my thread. I'll submit the proposal late Monday night--if anyone has one minute to glance at the proposal and see if it agrees with your thoughts on how the story needs to change, I'd be eternally, eternally grateful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robinski Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 That's great. I must apologise that I didn't get to your submission, but I guess you got plenty of good comments anyway. I guess my reading the proposal will be largely useless unless I've read the story! I will try to get to it, because I'm really interested to read the comment you got, and understand more about submitting, which I've never done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 Ecohansen, did they tell you what they wanted from a re-write? I've only gotten one request like that, but I got pretty specific notes and they took it when I sent it back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kais Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 It looks like a great project, Eisenheim! So. I submitted my story from last week to Metaphorosis on Thursday night--there were of course substantial edits between monday and Thursday, and all y'all's suggestions and edits were hugely helpful. I heard back this morning--Metaphorosis' response time is one of the things that attracted me to it. I wasn't in the 2% that is accepted outright, but I was in the 5% that is allowed to submit a rewrite to be reconsidered. So yay-ish, I guess. I'm about to post the editor's analysis and my re-write proposal on my thread. I'll submit the proposal late Monday night--if anyone has one minute to glance at the proposal and see if it agrees with your thoughts on how the story needs to change, I'd be eternally, eternally grateful. OMG HOORAY! for the R&R!!! I'll get to it tonight, so hopefully before you resubmit. Did they give you a timeframe to resubmit? Usually you're expected to take several weeks if not several months, and short turn around times can be off-putting. But if they gave you a deadline, that is a whole different can of worms. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ecohansen Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 Eisenheim and Kaisa The editor sent some succinct but specific guidelines for the rewrite. No time limit on the rewrite itself, but i thought i'd reply fairly promptly with an email outlining the directions I'd like to take the revised story. Robinski That would be hugely helpful. There were many, many passages in your last story that i was insanely jealous of. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
king007 Posted April 11, 2016 Author Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 (edited) I'm actually confused by something. In the submission emails, I have three sender names that are similar: eisenheim ---> Robin Duncan Robinski ----> Robinski Duncan kaiza -----> name removed for personal reasons is this really some huge coincidence where you all have "Robin" and "Duncan" in your names? Edited April 11, 2016 by king007 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
krystalynn03 Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 That three me for a loop, too!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eisenheim Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 yes, it is a coincidence. I understand that Robinski's been here for ages. I joined recently. Also, if you ever look for it, my published stuff will be under R. K. Duncan (once it gets published, which will actually be fairly soon.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Robinski Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 Yeah, Eisenheim and I have carved up the Robin Duncan marketplace. By the way, don't forget R.D. Pulfer, who shares our initials!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kais Posted April 11, 2016 Report Share Posted April 11, 2016 king007 could you do me a favor and remove my name from your post? I work to keep my IRL name and online presence as separate as possible. Amusing, nonetheless, about all the name similarities! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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