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Ah, thanks!

I disappear for a couple weeks, and I get referenced? Cool! I should be busy more often Can someone explain "fridging" to me? Not familiar with the term.

Thanks so much for the feedback @Robinski I really appreciate it

@AuthorityHellas16 Thank you so much for the feedback! I felt that giving the reader a break from the really dark material of the first chapter was a good idea, as I didn't want to bog them down too much. The chapter following this is another fairly dark one, explaining his first attempt, and how he discovered his powers. I do draw from personal experience, so that helps me bring some realism into those sections. I want it to be gritty and disturbing, because that's what its like to live it. I hope I don't go overboard with it. I also take breaks from the hard stuff with splashes of trivial conflicts to address the misconception that people with depression are all "doom and gloom" all the time. In my experience, this isn't true. They get quite good at faking happiness, and often times do actually feel happy. They just have trouble recognizing those moments retrospectively, weighing the bad more than the good. I'm kinda planning for all these trivial matters to further steamroll and build, compounding the really dark feelings. I'm glad you approve of Dylan! He's a lot of fun to write. I was worried that I wasn't getting the nuances quite right, as I don't have a whole lot of personal experiences with kids with autism, and I didn't want to offend anyone by getting it wrong, especially with his speech. Thanks again for the feedback. I really appreciate it

Thanks for the comments you gave me lots to think about. Whoops. Put in his current size in place for junior high weight. Thanks for the catch lol Didn't realize that for metahuman. I'll have to come up with something else. I'm actually just finishing up my teaching degree. That's where I first realized the cone of vision thing myself lol.

Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it Yea... my tense needs some work lol The first bolded section is discussed later. Long story short, the scars are from before his powers manifested, and he keeps trying to kill himself because he desperately wants it to work. Second bolded section: I think this is more fault with me saying he hadn't felt joy in a long time, than the later chapters. I've fought clinical suicidal depression for years, and its not that you are never happy, but more that you weigh the bad times far more heavily, and they come far more frequently. You still have happy moments, but they are few and far between. I want it to be realistic, so I think I have to change that initial statement. Thanks for bringing this to my attention

So, this is a portion of the first draft of my YA novel. The chapters are short right now, but I have plans to return to them later and flesh them out. The novel does deal with themes of depression, suicide, and mental illness, so if these are sensitive issues for you, read at your own discretion. Thanks!

Yep, I'm already ready

I figure, as long as it furthers plot or character development, you can put as much as you want. If it becomes gratuitous, then you should probably reel back the smut.

I totally missed this detail, so well done to everyone. Makes sense that its a different blade.

I just requested membership, but I would love to submit once its accepted

Granted, but the overload of information drives you insane. I wish for eternal happiness.

Precisely. So we can infer that they have a birth/life cycle that is at least comparable to humans. But then where do they get Parshman slaves from? Is there like a breeding season allowed for them? Or do they have Parshman Breeders that run like a breeding farm? Again, I don't think we have explicitly seen evidence of female Parshman in service, although @Krandacth said they vaguely remembered there being one in Tvlakv's service, but I don't believe this was confirmed (I haven't had a chance to look it up either). Even if this turns out to be a female Parshman slave (and neither we nor Shallan are mistaken), that's only one mentioned in two books, spanning a lengthy time period (flashbacks included). Just seems unlikely that natural breeding is a feasible option for Parshman, even if it were allowed by Alethi.

My apologies to both of you. I didn't realize there was a search function. I will try to be better about inherently knowing things, rather than specifically posting to upset you with my ignorance. In addition, I didn't specifically mean breeding. Do they capture Parshendi and enslave them, assuming they become dejected, and this explains their slaveform? Or is it said that they are bred? I also don't recall any female Parshmen being mentioned as slaves. Just curious.

So, if Parshmen don't mate unless in mateform, where do humans get more Parshmen slaves from? I assume that they die like normal beings, and we have seen them die, but how to they replace those numbers? This may be explained in the books and I just missed it, but it confuses me.