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  1. T minus one day. Time to get all those gears ready to roll! For music, I love some Lindsey Stirling, EDM genre tracks, some Eminem songs when I really want something to feel fast paced, Grace VanderWaal when I want to feel joy, and classic or romantic songs when I'm moving steadily.
  2. I think I'll go for NaNo this year. The month has enough leisure time for it, and I'm thinking about doing a loosely connected short story collection. Want to partner up for some back and forth updates, Robinski?
  3. So sparkly! Oh it's wonderful.
  4. I'm still firmly rooted in California, but feel free to hit me up whenever there's a Hollywood excursion in the calender. Till then, I'll also be saving on my end for big trips.
  5. How the mental magic works seems central to this story. I feel like some opportunity to really see it in action near the beginning would increase the impact of the ideas at the end. Knowing what Le is thinking without diving into her head also feels important to the character, though, so maybe an external use of some sort. Something like looking out a window and reading the mind of a town/city/province crier who's always there in the morning as a way to get daily news. Some major whiplash between the first paragraph and the second paragraph—from grounded to abstract. The "royally stormed" was a nice, casual intro tone, but the second paragraph starts so poetically that I lost track of what was going on. Does the end imply that she is going to deafen herself? It's not clear, but the "...hear things not meant for..." part combined with the last few of her lines make me suspect a bit.
  6. The chapter went through quite a lot. Out of everything, I think the horrifying aspect was the most memorable, and the inner turmoil was a close second. In the first few pages, S feels pride, accomplishment, and hope. That was pretty nice, but then there were knocks upon the door, and S responded with lots of internalized annoyance. Between the knocks and opening the door, there was what I visualized as one long eye roll. S references how several large commissions were unfinished. S was certain that possible customers would have to be turned away, disappointed, and yet the only commission that ends up being referenced is a big, finished one. Oh hey, explosion! Hm, that means a big part of my prediction is a flop. The place is already blown up and burnt down. On that note, I feel that the pacing of the action going on in this chapter is very similar to the pacing of everything else. The first one and a half pages in the chapter described a tense but peaceful alchemical process. Throwing the third pouch's contents onto NG2, and the violent suffering sequence afterward, lasted roughly the same amount of reading time. From this, I would guess that the story doesn't revolve much around urgency—there is always time to think, feel, and react. S briefly thinks about how the house contains dangerous solvents that could be used to melt NG1 and NG2, but doesn't refer to the pouches with substances that we see do practically the same thing—worse, actually. I get a fearless vibe from S. The knocks came late enough for there to be a, "At this hour?", but S didn't even consider the possibility of danger. Likewise, S was careful with the pouches, but never had enough doubt to hesitate—the consequences of accidentally spilling the extract onto oneself was never considered hard or long enough for it to be described. This also speaks about how much confidence is placed in S's own expertise.
  7. Oh nice! The world could do with more data production. My formula result for Dreamt and Lost is as follows: U = 100 * (8+1+0+65+(0.5*158)) / 28524 0.53 Wait, that doesn't feel quite right. I don't use the words "possibly" or "possible"? I regularly say those words aloud. Double checked. I guess not. I do use the word "probably" a handful of times. Also, the word "maybe" never appeared more than once in a chapter, except for one recent instance where a character had a habit of speaking like a broken mirror. I have the data necessary to do this formula for The Bird and the Sword by Amy Harmon, which has a tone that I think is similar to mine despite having a different point of view, so I'll also run that below: U = 100 * (57 + 8 + 23 + 410 + (0.5*550)) / 104160 0.74 Notably, 19 out of the 23 uses of "possibl" were the word "impossible" or "impossibly". It doesn't make a big difference in the U, but it caught my attention. Do different story tones make a huge difference in the use of these words? Do the stories I like to read have similar scores? I wish I had more sources to try this out on. It's a fun set of ideas!
  8. That was a pretty intense chapter. I'd call it thrilling. I'm glad S caught on to the witch thing with some hindsight instead of drawing that revelation out. I wouldn't say the monologue put anything new into perspective, but that's mostly because I'm already familiar with the subject matter. Instead, I think it's good at showing the frustrations S is wrestling with. It frames S's hopes, fears, and disappointments—since this entire monologue wasn't explained directly to Ma, that means there's hope remaining. If Ma returns and aids in a way that fulfills S's hopes, it'd be a huge emotional payoff. Wild speculation! It's a favorite thing of mine to do, though it'll be a challenge to get anywhere close with only a couple chapters read. The huge emotional payoff of Ma intuitively knowing what S wholeheartedly wants is on the path of a happy ending. Since this is a dark adult fantasy, I'd say this is a hope that's probably meant to be shattered. Sawdust and heat. The card has been drawn, and so I expect to see it in play. An important explosion shall surely grace us. Home sounds like the ground zero. Sa seems likely to live and inherit what is being forced unto S. Since Qu is involved, Ma will be the one standing at the end of that. So, in short, for the ending I expect everyone to converge in the village/town/city that is S's home. An explosion would be a decent way for S to break away from Am, Qu, and the rest. Ma and Sa rejoining S after that feels fitting. They'd have to bring any tools and materials to S that were likely introduced earlier in the story. S's alchemy can come into play with those materials and anything regained at home. S will reject Am. A part of that rejection will include getting an opportunity to magically erase the mark left this chapter, but refusing. Am will likely die, which would be horrifying for S despite everything that has happened. In the aftermath of an explosion, there's going to be a lot of witnesses gathered, so the resolution will be widely known. Sa'll will more than likely have an opportunity to prove his worthiness—probably by utilizing the carpentry that Am looked down upon in this chapter. No idea what parts Ma will play. I wouldn't be surprised if Ma fulfilled S's hopes right before heroically dying in an act that takes out Qu. That'd be a vital turnaround moment. That's about all I can piece together with my current puzzle pieces.
  9. Something short after being gone for awhile. This chapter is a bit of a reunion. It's meant to be a little show of how everyone is feeling, and what Lilium is like.
  10. Oh, I'm here. I'm just tuckered out from some Father's day dinner celebrations and bad work news this morning. Wanted to put some finishing touches on the chapter I'm submitting after I get home, but of course I'm also going to pick someone up from the airport after work, so it'll be on the late end of the spectrum. I'm sure everyone else is also right around the corner. Probably holiday lag as well.
  11. Oh yes, hordes are gathering. In for the 19th, as well.
  12. @kais @Robinski I thought "Eskimo" was the slur? I'm certain that Inuit tends to be separate from First Nations, and that the major Inuit organizations have continued to represent themselves by the same identity in recent summits and meetings. First Peoples does tend to include both First Nations and Inuit, though. --- Moth's recount of Quirk's convincing made me smile. It's brief, but very amusing. The trademark symbol also earns a smirk when it appeared. I guess I'd call that meta-humor. I, too, would want a SIG Sauer Pjackpot. I imagine it'd be gold. Oh, do you want typos pointed out? I'm not certain, so I'll just do it once, but let me know. "...a patch of grey darkness again(st) the brown..." on page 4. On a different technical level, I was also a tad bothered when you'd mention "15 metres" or "30 metres" at some points, and "ten metres" or "seven metres" at others. In hindsight, I see you switch to digits whenever it goes over ten, but reading it on its own was jarring. It felt unpredictable. You know, oddly enough, I didn't expect animals even though you mentioned someone's warning about coyotes. I continued to think of gray blobs until they were called a "pair of coyotes" by the text. Since Moth was the only subject in motion during all those paragraphs after she remembered the warning, I didn't give the beasts a second thought. It's like they were hairless, breathless statues until she began to run. Them turning out to be androids further added to this confusion. --- I didn't catch any flirting vibes, but the conversation between Quirk and Greiner was fun to follow. There were fun revelations and villainous monologues. The action of this viewpoint was very good at drawing my attention, but it did lose me briefly as I wondered why Moth didn't pull out her stubby pistol when she was under attack earlier.
  13. My interpretation of the gist of S's explanation is to adore the whole person, and not the part that's familiar or preferred. Perfectly understandable if that's truly the case. --- About halfway through, I grew tired of being told how the architecture everywhere was skillfully made, or how it was done in certain ways by certain organizations. I got the point, but didn't feel it. I haven't read the previous chapters, so I'm not sure if it makes sense for S to be so familiar with all these things, but all the mentions so far were highly specific and noticeable. When the girl at the inn justified the high price, it was a bit of a surprise how easily everyone accepted it. The description of the town up to this point was festive, but not crowded. How crowded it'd be was explained a few paragraphs later. I saw a mention of how it was someone's turn to "...tend a wound." However, that didn't come up again. The wound was just wrapped in the same cloth as before. I wondered if anyone tried to ask for spare cloth or bandages from the inn.
  14. Welcome back! Glad to see you again, and I'm so happy to hear that the publishing gears are turning well on your end! I was gone the entire time, so I've mostly been completely lost.
  15. I like what this foreshadows. The cover is enough for me, since I usually don't buy the cool extras until I'm already a fan. That said, I'm attracted to pretty or durable display objects. Metal wire art/figurines, paperweights (or anything with some weight to it), and jewelry are my favorites. They don't really need to be for sale to draw me over. I wander by and idle if there's something uncommon. Some nice atmospheric music is a big plus. A short blurb printed on the walls would be convenient—something that tells me more about the genre and story without having me crack open a book.