Eagle of the Forest Path

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  1. ... and how do the White Supremacists feel about that? Or, for that matter, Fairy Fundamentalists?
  2. Alternatively, you could dig down and use a version based on traditional mythology, instead of the versions prototyped by Tolkien (and endlessly copied since). The Celtic (and/or Nordic) versions of elves like the Tuatha de Danann, Germanic Dwarfs (note the non-Tolkien plural), et cetera. It depends on "style" and intended audience, IMO. For middle grade and young adult audiences, I believe you'd be best served with versions as recognizable as possible. If the "style" is satirical, you also need recognizable versions, in order to mock them. If you're going for a gritty, realist feel instead, then traditional mythology is your friend. There's also the Neverwhere (Neil Gaiman, 1996) route, it's undoubtedly fantasy, in a modern, urban setting, with non-human creatures, yet no classical fantasy races (apart from a single angel).
  3. Try the Real Names section on http://www.fantasynamegenerators.com for inspiration.
  4. Elantris, actually.
  5. Wow! That's like, half as tall as Mount Everest. (Discounting that Everest is on a plateau, so it's not actually 30,000 feet from foot to top) That depends on what you want. Granite or basalt are sturdiest, so you can dig out more without compromising the structure and house a larger population. But if you use weaker rocks like sandstone or even limestone, you can add more risk of cave-ins, which is something you might like in the story. I suggest that you first figure out what you need from the stone for the story, then find a geologist or engineer to work out what materials work best for that. The alternative is that you decide on the material(s) first, then find the geologist or engineer to work out what that means for the story. Okay, then! But what happens if the magic fails?
  6. No idea about the excavation thing. But concerning the towers, how tall do you want them (it), and how steeply angled are the outside walls? 304 mi squared, is that a square 304 miles on a side or 304 square miles? Since you talk about excavating, I assume they're natural features, so what kind of rocks they consist of is going to be an important factor. A granite spire is going to be different from a sandstone spire. More than that, at the sizes you're talking about it's probable that any one spire is going to contain areas of different types of rock. Do you have a plan for ventilation and lighting?
  7. Big events brought to a satisfying conclusion. Although, I don't understand why the mayor tells the E that she agrees to the contract. It was signed under duress, after all, and the E is making it pretty obvious that he'd like to just rip it up. W kind of reminds me of the French guy in Raiders of the Lost Ark, I'm sort of sorry there's no face-melting (but that wouldn't be appropriate for your target audience, anyway). Far from promises made at the beginning I feel you made a promise here at the end: I look forward to reading 20.000 fathoms under the Nether .
  8. Yeah, I hear Alaska's terrible for surfing.
  9. No problem, simple google search (la brea tar pits magic book). Huh, I actually hadn't read the full synopsis yet. That is bothersome. Here's some actual feedback from me (mostly questions though): Magic - spell levels -> are the levels solely dependent on the type of bone, or more on the amount of energy? i.e. if eating one chicken bone allows you to cast one lvl1 spell, would eating two chicken bones allow a lvl2 spell or just two lvl1s? - unicorn horn -> would that include narwhal tusks, which vikings sold as unicorn horns (proving that the proverbial Nigerian prince isn't just a modern problem)? - extraction -> is the burning etc. required, or is it more of a practical issue? could they just munch on chicken bones in a pinch (beware of splinters)? -> -> just read @Jorville 's comment on this and I disagree with his premise: the extraction could be considered as a type of distillation, getting rid of the useless parts of the bone while keeping the active component. Setting - I joined RX after you'd finished with W&S, so what's the tech level here? Since it's based on the UK, is it Tudor, regency, Victorian? Scene 1 -> I'm assuming from this that magic is illegal without some sort of permit. Or is it the dumpster diving that's the problem here? Scene 3 -> If you want to avoid a LL fanfic, maybe avoid the ageing spinster spymaster? Scene 4 -> Why did D pick J? Because he's the only mage in the crew? (edit: aaah, just got to scene 8...) Scene 5 -> Did G, as the planner, have a reason for choosing this particular house? The storm feels sort of deus ex machina to me, could be fun to have the crew engineer a disaster they can clean up afterward. Or imply that D had government mages cause the storm? (edit: again, scene 8) Scene 7 -> Are they covering up something with the staged fight? Scene 8 -> Hold up, didn't you say G has no hidden agenda? I know you also said unreliable narrator, but isn't that going a bit far to even do that in the outline? Scene 9 and 10 -> textbook example of the scene-sequel format. Scene 11 -> I don't see why this can't just be part of 10. Overall this looks promising. I did notice that basically all the interactions are J and C, with a little G and D thrown in. P and K don't show up in the outline at all, so what's their role in the story, besides filling out the crew roster?
  10. I think I remember that as a book of the week on WX, if we're thinking of the same thing it's California Bones by Greg Van Eekhout (pronounced ache-how-t)
  11. Well, yes they could have been terraformed, I've actually been assuming that they're similar to environments on good old Earth from the start. But that doesn't change the fact that you've got a limited surface area, and therefore limited resources. Small(-ish) islands (the type you find in the sea) can't support a population of large animals, such as elephants for example. Interestingly, you can have dwarf versions of such species on those islands. I'm thinking of Flores Island in Indonesia, where there used to be not only mini-elephants, but also Homo floresiensis, which apparently got nickamed "hobbit".
  12. I'd say mainly birds, and glider-type critters like flying squirrels. (and bugs, lots and lots of bugs) No large animals in any case, as food supplies are going to be limited (except for those that can get back and forth to the surface).
  13. Oh, drat. I wanted to do something like that too. How about if you make up a room-temperature superconductor (let's call it Islandwavium)? That doesn't qualify as "relatively natural" anymore, but whatever. I mean, we're talking fantasy here, right? Islandwavium should be strongly diamagnetic, so it ought to be repelled by the planet's magnetic field, if I understand correctly.
  14. It's been rather quiet in the lounge for a while, so ... Funny thing happened recently. I've been reading A short history of nearly everything (described as "a rough guide to science") and it contains a formula for Hubble's law (about the relationship between the distance of galaxies and the velocity at which they are moving away from us each other). It was printed here as H0 = v/d I read it as "ho equals vee dee" (and then rolled around laughing for a while). PS: It's also where I got my new member title, as the book points out that ambergris - a fixative used in perfumes - is actually the parts of giant squid that sperm whales can't digest. So to quote the relevant footnote: "The next time you spray on Chanel Number 5 (assuming you do so), you may wish to reflect that you are dousing yourself in distillate of unseen sea monster."
  15. Words to strike fear into the heart of anyone who's ever watched Blackadder.